Fractured Greyhound Routes - Comments

” Mist fogged the windows of the greyhound bus as it road through the freeway. Drizzle sprinkled from the thick clouds overhead sending little droplets to splatter softly on the rusted vehicle that had endured so many sodden afternoons. I looked out the window I had been tracing hearts on, decorating the mist residue with my numb fingertips”

I absolutely love how you started this story off. Your detail is phenomenal, and I could picture so clearly everything you were describing, almost as if I were seeing it right up on the TV screen in a movie.

Your wording really makes this story flow so smoothly, almost poetically, and I find that very appealing in a story; to not have choppy sentences. It’s just lets the reader enjoy the story so much more.

I am totally in love with you for writing this story. I’ve read quite a few frerards that involve them running away, and I find that they were horribly cliché. This is my first time reading a frank/mikey pairing in this type of setting, and you have made it completely original, and your own.

Overall, your spelling/ grammar was amazing. Which is always a good thing.

I really enjoyed reading this, and I’m looking forward to more.

♥

Ugh, awww....
Losing chapters before they're posted is THE WORST. ><
But I'm glad that you're gonna re-type it. :]]

I totally owed you a mention...
Plus you deserve like, every single person on mibba [and then some] to read this.
It's GORGEOUS.

-new reader-

I've only read the first two chapters so far, but this story is awesome! You are an amazing writer! This is definately different to any other mcr fanfics i've read, from what i can tell so far.
I'd quote bits that i like, but frankly i loved it all, your descriptions are perfect and it's impossible not to get instantly drawn in.
I'll definately be subscribing and reading the remaining chapters!

Ok folks
this is the scoop;

my computer totally spazed on me
so, every bit of memory stored in my computer was wiped out
including chapter six.

I was unhappy anyways with the chapter
so I'm going to have to re-type the whole thing -.-
I'm really sorry this is taking forever
I promise I'll get it up!

thank you so much
i love you guys =]]]
esp. carcinogenic for the mention in her profile ^^

Update when you can, please.
I'm gooooing craaaaazy. :O
Ilovethissomuch.

More soon, please?
Or I'll have to harass you on myspace. tehe. :]

FUCK. ME.
I'm not sure that I have any words left for this story.
I just - Ugh.
Maybe it's bad that I can relate this much to certain aspects, but honestly...
It's painful how much I can find myself in those kids.
And I absolutely love every minute of it. :]

There were too many amazing things in that update for my comment
to even begin to do justice. The father's eyes, the guts it takes to step into
the street... the "exploding" bus... the drugs, the sick pedophilia references...
EVERYTHING.

Ohhhhhman.

I'm not gonna sleep tonight.
That was beyond fucking good.

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I'm not sure whether I'm at ease with this chapter, I might edit it later x_x
eeee, I've had the beginning down for a while, I just needed to finish it.

bluh!

I hope you like it =]]]]
I'm not on vacation anymore.
I've still got work, but that usually doesn't interferred all that much. Not until school at least.

Thanks for reading!!

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Yay for updates :D
I love this story so much, your writing style is unique and is so full of emotion that it captivates the reader.

Cannot wait for more :)

OH SHITTT.That was absolutely amazing.

I just... erg. You have no idea how badly I feel for Frankie [&& Mikey] right now.
This story has definitely wound itself around my heartstrings.
Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.
I have a huge fetish for 'running away' kind of stories,
&& this one is beyond fantastic.

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"ZOMG, she updated !!" :mrgreen:

Brilliantly written! I cannot wait for more.
<3

OMG THANK YOU

For all your comments! You seriously make me happy when I read your feedback.

I'm still not quite back from vacation, but I am writing and I still have so much muse for this story =]]]]
I hope you keep reading!

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Come back from vacation soon.
This story is incredible.
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More. More more more more.
I'm greeeeeeeedy. :]
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Fab update. =]]

I wonder what's up with the night terrors. &I also wonder about big brother Gerard.
He hasn't been mentioned yet&& he's one of the most mentionworthy people I know, so..

More would be appreciated. <3

Aww, you got me teary. :]
I loved the night terror && the part about the lake.
&& I'll look forward to the happy moments too. :]]
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Thank you guys ^_^

I love your comments! && I know this is such a depressing story so far but there'll be happy moments too, I promise =]]]]

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*subscribes.

This is amazingly well written, thanks for sharing it with us. =]
More when you can, please.

I love it again! :]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]].
Poor kids, though.

THANK YOU!!

For all your lovely feedback!
you guys are awesome =]]]]]
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