I'm really liking this story, so I guess I'll say well done before I carry on with this comment! I know that others have said this before me, but the plot is really strong, I haven't actually read anything like this before which is a massive breath of fresh air and kudos for originality. I think that the main character alone is really well described and developed, she seems to be to be kind of quirky in her own way, if that makes sense. I can see that you've put a lot of thought into making her come through in the story, I like the little details that you've added into the whole story too, you're a good writer and the story flows pretty well. Maybe reading over a few times would help with grammar and running on sentences but in reality this is still good, so well done again!
October 31st, 2013 at 07:44pm