Dude, all I have to say is that was amazing!!!
June 12th, 2009 at 10:39pm
I like that your story was so original, no cliches except for the love triangle. There were a few mistakes, such as: "peaking his head through the door" and "nibbling my lower lip". And for me, I would have enjoyed it even more if you had added what happened after the wedding. Maybe she had an affair with her other love interest? Maybe she divorced her husband later on? However, the story as it is now is good. I don't feel it was sad, just the truth, a real every day story. People don't have time for Once Upon A Time anymore, they can't put their lives on hold to wait for prince charming, and I like that you thought of that with the story.
Good Job!
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