Freight Hopper - Comments

Oh drama! Hahah I'm really curious as to what actually happened between the two of them. Your a great writer! Can't wait for the next update!

Wow. you're back...again. I always liked this story and now that the plot is starting to thicken somewhat it is becoming a favourite and I am wanting more. so please, for my selfishness, update soon.

Much love
TCS

Haha, don't mind me for JUST opening my email and finding this update... It was nice. :) intense, even. The mother and daughter remind me sliiiiightly of yourself... :p it's very nice, love.

^ and I just have to say your signature made me laugh... I get it! :)

Oh my god, thank you!
This is definitely the best chapter yet, merry christmas!

I totally forgot Mibba even existed until you started writing again!
This is such amazing story!

Yeah, well, that chapter's been sitting in a word doc for months waiting to be perfected so, yeah. :) Besides, I was inspired yesterday. :)

You updated. :)

love this.
*subsribes*

update and i'll give you some form of sugary, rainbow lollies.

Poor frank! D:

You updated!! iloveyou!!!

Awww I'm Gonna Miss You.
Have Fun(:

Fuck yeah!
I've been waiting forever for you to update(:
I fucking love it!

awesome!

:3 iloveyou!!! :D it's still amazing. Lawl.

this is very...interesting. i like it. i think i would understand it more if a) i wasn't tired and b) i was american,

love and bugs
JessimickaH

I like this.
You're a good writer! x]

Well I'm sort of assuming this is a Frerard, but it doesn't really say..? Correct me if I'm wrong. I'm still going to subscribe, obviously. I love your writing. :D

The only thing is, there were a couple mistakes, and quite a few parts where you switched from third person to first person.. it was a little confusing. Like here:

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He nods and darts off towards his stuff. As my things come into sight, I notice my blanket is no longer balled up on the ground, but folded in a perfect square, and my bag is resting neatly on top of it. I smile, thanking Rat in my head. He sits for a moment, resting his legs.

:shifty I hate giving constructive criticisms because I always just feel like I'm being mean.. :lol:

Other than that, this is really good so far. I'm excited. :mrgreen:

Wow.
Your a great writer(:
I love ur stories, and this one is so exception(:
Hope you update soon.
*subscribes*