Diagnosis: Delusion - Comments

Awww, you're very welcome. Thanks for the message telling me of the reply. I've very glad that I made you smile. There's truly no reason for you to be an insecure writer. You're a genuine artist. You make that very clear. You're one of the few writers who have succeeding in enveloping my mind.

-blushes- I'm speechless. Really. I've been holding my fingers above the keyboard, floating for 10 minutes. I couldn't form a sentence. I think I still can't =) Your comment blew me away. Like a hurricane. I was simply swept away.

Thank you. Thank you again. You made me grin like a kid =)

The shattered mirror, its sharp pointed debris reflected the neon streaks; dispersing them all around the storage.

I could hear the mirror shattering when I read that line. This entire story is so well written that a movie started playing in my mind without any effort on my part. A lot of the time, I find myself having to place myself somewhere in the story. You had me there since the very first line-- and it only got better.

It must be hell going through what Aaron does, (that's my one cat's name, btw) and he's desperately looking for an escape. 10 years? That's torture. It's devastating and frightening at the same time... I mean, I feel bad for him being so caged and limited and miserable. Yet I'd hate to see what he would do if he wasn't caged and bound. He's trapped in agony, whether it's from being where he is and from what he's victim of... or whatever situations and alternate universes he makes for himself.

You know what's insanely odd? I had a dream about this story last night... I'd never read it before. I didn't even know who it was by. I found it by following a magnetic pull... somehow. I don't know how. It reminds me of an old "friend" of mine... she's a pathological liar. All of the memories and scenes that she saw, that she told me about weren't real, but she thoroughly believed them. It's a rather hellish situation, for all parties involved. I definately felt a connection with this story.

You're a superb writer. You make magic with your words... they're very vivid and intense. I was most certainly engrossed in this story. Amonst all of the writers on Mibba who are floating somewhere in the clouds, I can tell you're a writer to come to whenever grounding is need. You have a genuine and unique talent.

Thank you for writing this... and if you had anything to do with it being in my dream, thank you.

Lonna.:

My lady, you have a way with words.

You kept me on the edge of my seat the whole read and I wasn't expecting that, but then again I know Stephen King's novels and every word and sentence was breath taking. This is really a crime story. Only if I could write like that.

The detail was beautiful and even it was as horrid as blood and murder you still kept the essences of beauty even with all the morbid atmosphere.

There wasn't one part that wasn't my favorite line, and I love crime stories and everything dealing with mystery, and you pulled it off.

Masterpiece, yes indeed.

The way you wrote this review shows that you know with words and don't let anyone tells you different. I read half of your story and I can say, and prove that (:

Thank you, Lonnie (:

My lady, you have a way with words.

You kept me on the edge of my seat the whole read and I wasn't expecting that, but then again I know Stephen King's novels and every word and sentence was breath taking. This is really a crime story. Only if I could write like that.

The detail was beautiful and even it was as horrid as blood and murder you still kept the essences of beauty even with all the morbid atmosphere.

There wasn't one part that wasn't my favorite line, and I love crime stories and everything dealing with mystery, and you pulled it off.

Masterpiece, yes indeed.

Again thank you so much, Stephanie. I can't describe how much I appreciate this.
Thank you!

A myriad of medicaments disguised in plastic bottles behind the Perspex, emerged from the darkness as the doctor's bloody hand switched the lights on.

Whoa.
Simply beautiful, I couldn't have found anyone better to write this! :shock:

King style?
You did a very swell job, Josipa.
I am very jealous of your gift.
Yes, I do think you have a gift; I hope you treasure it so.

Marij:

You've just proven the fact that writers can be artists, too.

That was fucking insane.

I just pinched myself. :shifty
How can words be this amazing?

Why thank you, you're making me blush (:

You've just proven the fact that writers can be artists, too.

That was fucking insane.

I just pinched myself. :shifty
How can words be this amazing?

Thank you, thank you *bows down*

Seriously, my jaw dropped.

<3

All the big words blew my tiny brain slightly. Mind you, am I any better? XD

I love it, I really do.

Thanks!1 Yeah, I'll write more, don't worry (:

Wow! This is wonderful! I hope you write more! There were hardly any spelling or grammar mistakes. That's how good it was.

You both blew my mind away by saying that, really. Helena, I can't thank you enough for recognizing a higher meaning of this story - his everlasting craving for superiority. I'm glad you could see that. And no, no research was included while writing a story - Ducky's post mortem and psychiatric observations and Grissom's mysterious bearing were enough (:

Die. While reading your comment, the smile on my face was only getting bigger and bigger. Now it's stuck on my face (: You called me an artist, a natural born writer... I don't even have words to emphasize my appreciation.

THAKYOUBOTH!!11!

"I killed the patient. I stabbed him with a silver scalpel and left his riddled body lying in the surgery room," he retorted absently , placing the tablets inside a pocket; trying to wreathe his addiction. -That was on of my favorite lines.

But

His patient riddled with scalpel was lying in his own puddle of blood, in the middle of the surgery room. The blood was still dripping on the floor; looking refined under the blinding lights. -That was my favorite line, possibly out of everything I have read, including published novels.

Josipa... ._.
You keep raising the bar every time. You're last story, blew my mind away. I was thinking; there is no way in hell any other story ever created could top that. But you did, you created a story that is indescribable and could never be written by anyone else, not even a pro Author. You have blown my already blown away mind.

In all honesty, this story not only had me believing that Jonathan was a doctor and a survivor of murder, but that he was a real person. You use words that hardly anyone would think of using to describe the place and the characters.

The brevity of life; of the one that he just took leaving a corpse riddled with scalpel in the surgery room, struck his brusque mind.

Not many people can even create original and believable twist within their stories, but you did.

“Aaron, we’ve been through this scenario twenty times before. You’re not a damn doctor,” the man smiled, untying the straps of Aaron’s strait jacket.
My face seriously was like: then :tehe: when I read that. It was just so unexpected and brilliant at the same time.

I love stories about murder, corpses and serial killers. But, you have mixed in another genre that I love; insanity. And that made my day. (I'm a freak. :D)

Josipa!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11111111 You are born with a talent that no one in the world could ever learn. I truly do believe this. You have a talent which goes further than just being a talented writer, people like you are called artists.

It had to be said. :file:

That took me like 15 minutes to write, so obviously I love this story so much to do that. :finger:

Oi you twisted criminal mind with a touch of sarcasm!
The intro was captivating. I love it how you enfolded a peculiar character into his own mind taken over by his deranged psyche. Amazing.
The choice of words made me a part of his mad world even more. How he needs the feeling of superiority, so he calls himself a doctor. That's pretty realistic and expected from a patient like that.
I don't know if you've done any research before writing this, but you've done an amazing job writing this, both regarding the plot and the character. You chose a really good way to introduce us to him, without writing a cliche or something. The twist only emphasizes your skills.

*blushes*

THANKYOUSOMUCH! You always give so amazing reviews to a pimp like me :lmfao

Speaking of Smear it Splendid... I like the title and I assure you, I will read it. Hang on my words.

Once again, thank you

I did not expect that twist. I mean, I should have seen it coming, but... you have a way of pouncing on unsuspecting readers with twisted endings.

Can I say more about the description? The opening lines were so... they gave such amazing visuals, such flourish, such a beautiful touch to your writing,

It had my heart pounding while I was reading; dunno why. I also loved the whole scene when he thought he killed the patient; I tried to pick a particular part, but I couldn't. It's all too WOW.

New masterpiece from the girl who pwns all rock star girlfriends.

I really ought to be reading your crime stories already. -_-

Btw, you're such a pimp for PMing me this. :lmfao Naw, I'm kidding, because I loved it! :hug:

Can you read Smear It Splendid when you have time? Thank youuuu!