I'm really loving this, I hope you don't stop updating. I became so frustrated, because I could barely remember any of their names, I was always like,"Wait, who's Fred again?" So I had to go on wikipedia and research. xD As soon as I read Lorna's power description I was like,"...Magneto?" Because it's so similar to his power, but I know it's not the same, no worries. While I worry at the fact that you are using a high school sophomore/senior as your main character, Lorna fits extremely well.
Erica Lynne Reveiws is wondering how James suddenly became Logan.
I Love This ^-^ ha n in the beginning it was like you memerized the entire movie, which is soo cool cuz i like know almost the entire movie by heart lol n Wade is soo freaking awesome keep updating its gettin good
-sighs- Yes. Another comment. Your updates make my day! xD One little problem: "Logan must of said or did something because him and Remy were in the mist of a fight." 'Mist' should be 'midst', and you might want to fix the wording of the sentence a little. :] Like, "Logan must have said or done something because he was in the midst of a fight with Remy." Just a suggestion. :]
Wow, three consecutive comments...I feel stalker-ish. xD
You have no idea how excited I was to see that this had updated. :D I was totally shocked when Bobby came into the mix, by the way. Keep up the good work.
I really like how you use things from the movie, but you don't rely completely on it. I don't know much about Lorna Dane because I haven't read much X-Men, but it seems like you're writing for her really well. I LOVE LOVE LOVE your pairing(-ish) her with Wade. The only thing that you might want to change is some of the words- some of them are misspelled, or you used the wrong word, but I'm pretty sure someone else has pointed that out.
First off, I want to say that this is the first story here on Mibba I've seen that was about mutants. So that was interesting.
OK, so you used the wrong word here in chapter one, His voice held no shock or disgust in it as I except when someone learned about my secret. Expected would make more sense :cute:
The underlined word should be in past tense, stiffened instead of, My hand stiffen around the door handle but I kept my silence.
You accidentally used the wrong word here, nothing major but still, "What exactly to you know about me?" Do, would be correct.
Haha, I loved how at the end, when he mentioned her plans to go to medical school and the price for it, she decided OK, let's go.
Nice job, well written. Keep up the good work :cute:
Poor Lorna has to put up with Wade... Great X-men fan fic, keep the updates coming! (: This story has some serious potential and it's very addicting. Plus, I can only imagine how hilarious it will be to see Lorna trying to seduce Remy.