Face Down - Comments

This is really fantastic! (Tip: Try saying "abusing a girl" instead of "abusing up a girl". It's much better that way.)
I like it. Keep up your awesome writing! :)

i really liked how this story was connected with the song. just like fingerprints, i loved how you used strikeouts. it really did feel like it was an actual letter and i thought it was very sweet. it seemed like he really cared about her. i thought you did a good job.

omg loved it!!! i've been reading this ocntests entried and it was one of the best i've read :)

Good story, great use of the song as well.

Although, this needs some fixing, "I told you countless times about Adam and about how he got expelled for abusing up a girl at a school nearby, but ignorantly you still went out with him last night anyway."

Instead of abusing up a girl, try saying abusing a girl :cute:

Also, "I had all the answers right in front of me, but I could’ve tried harder, but didn’t. I saw the bruises and the scars."

That but is not needed there, you should remove it from the sentence.

I love the ending statements where Nick questions her sanity. Very nice touch.

Good luck in the contest :tehe:

I thought this was excellent, I was humming the song whilst listening to it :tehe:
I really like how you interpretated the song, but also made it your own.
I loved the use of strike-outs, made it seem like a letter so much more :tehe:
And, the length added to the letter effect.

But you? You’re worse off. You knew from the start. Why didn’t you tell anyone? Why didn’t you tell me, your best friend? Why didn’t you just break up with him? You’re actions make me question your sanity.
The rhetorical questions fired so many questions in my head about the two characters :tehe:

I thought this was written excellently, and you have talent (:
Well done, and good luck in the contest :arms:
(Sorry, this is sucky feedback but I'm almost asleep :tehe:)

Wow this is so good! And I absolutely love this song. You really did it justice.