Guilt and Curiosity Go Hand in Hand - Comments

Oh...wow. :mrgreen:
Thank you so much!

A story about this? Hmmmm... sounds cool. Although, I'm trying to improve my writing so I'm going to be writing a lot more one-shots. But I'll definitely keep this in mind for a story when I feel like I've learned something! :D

It actually felt like a movie scene

It was sort of eerie before that moment where he saw her body so I was at the edge of my seat wondering what he had done. This could very easily be turned into an actual story…I would totally read it.

Also I applaud you for being able to make this in general, I could never squeeze such a good writing into only 100 words…shoot I could never fit such a good writing into 1000 words…

To make this short…you should totally write more drabbles, I found nothing wrong with this amazing story. I really wish I could find more ways to describe it…

All of the “If only...” thoughts clouded his mind and he couldn’t concentrate on his work, which was the only positive thing going for him.

I can totally agree with that. My If Only thought is…If only this drabble were a story…now that If Only thought keeps my hopes up…no pressure though.

:D

This is so good Cherry. I love it.
I especially agree with LucieChaos.
She explained exactly as I thought. Amazing job!

That was really good.
I concur with everyone who said good things. >.<
^_^

This was...really good.
I'm not much into drabbles, but...this caught me somehow.

I particularly love the eerie tone you give off before the action - it's like watching a horror movie where the woman is walking down the house and looking through doors, then eventually get yanked in.

The first two paragraphs, what I liked about them, was that it showed off real human emotions. Not fake, none of this seemed fake it all. It seemed like a real life situation, even the surprising ending. I guess that's the way the emotion takes it as. I like how you crammed in so much into so little - it takes talent to do that and you've got it.

The only problem I had with it, or like all drabbles, is that it leaves me confused in the end. That can be a bad or a good thing, in fact it's always pretty much both.

All in all, it was nicely done. Good job =D

=]
Your comments mean so much to me!
I LOVE them.

Thank you! I had never really written a drabble before, and I spent about an hour and a half on it (to make sure it was exactly 100 words, make it sound right, etc.) and I am ecstatic to know that you really liked it.

I shall continue to keep writing. =]

First off, i can't believe that only one person has commented this. :shock:

You're a brilliant writer. Seriously.

That was just perfeeeeeection. :D It was short and simple (in a good way, i promise :)) but you had everything summed up in just a short piece of writing. It was superb. :mrgreen:

It was all really foreboding and just..well, just spot on really. :tehe:

I loved the part/s where you had written: "All of the “If only...” thoughts clouded his mind and he couldn’t concentrate on his work, which was the only positive thing going for him." This part was just great because we can all relate to the "if only..." thoughts, if you know what i mean? As in, everybody gets them occasionally when something bad (or good) happens so in my opinion, it just made the character just that bit more human. Its also clear about how much the female character's absence is bothering him.

I also loved the end piece: "No answer. He shifted his gaze towards the first landing of the staircase, and that’s when he saw her lifeless form slumped against the wall." Well, i didn't love it because of what the male character saw, i loved it because the final sentence is so open for your own ideas, to let your own imagination wander yet at the same time, it sums up everything perfectly. In my opinion, i think you ended the piece perfectly and if i were you, i would have ended it in exactly the same place.

Yep...I think that's all i have to say at the moment, to be honest. It was just great. So, pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease keep writing. :D

Much luff,
Lucie
xxxxxx

I love it!!