Guitar Picks and Paper Cartoons - Comments

@ Lyra
Yes but probably not for another week since things are a bit crazy here. i want to have a clear idea on a few attributes of the sequel before i publish the first chapter

Good ending my dear. I only started reading this a couple of days ago! Is there going to sequel?

Thanks for the comments. Sorry I sucked at updating. Luckily I know the ending and it should be finished soon. I may even do some serious re-writes on this since I feel like the beginning needs some work. Let me know what you think.

I love this! Please keep writing? :)

I love this story!please update soon?!?!

I, too, agree with shellshell but can't wait to read more :) Great job!

realize*

Hey this story is amazing, I love it. Can't help but realise its been ages since it was last updated, you should carry on with this story because its so good xxx

I would like you to update the story.
I agree with shellshell.
Still, I'm going to look forward to your story.
Make it more good.

It's a good plot, but you need to really work on the depth of the story. For example, I don't really care about the main character Anya (Sorry if I spelt it wrong), as we don't really see much of her personality. All we can make out is that she has a shitty life and seems depressed. As for Gerard, he seems like a random guy that is there for her. We don't know anything about how they would act.
Also, your moving forward quite a bit, try to balance the chapter out with more descriptions, thoughts maybe of the characters. Though, keep your dialouge, this helps us too.

I would suggest a re-write, but that's your choice.

x.

I wonder if he will notice the life taker expression

Great update, did she die and come backfrom the dead, that'd be cool!!
More soon?

I just started reading this and it's really good. A lot of Gerard/ OFC stories are predictable, but this one feels more realistic in the way that old friends are relating to each other. I also really liked chapter 5 the thing she says about wanting to disappear. It was really well thought out.

Keep it up :)

I love this story, good job :) please update soon!

that last paragraph was real deep

huh
i wonder what could happen next

uh oh
she's crying

I got the first comment! YAY!
I LOVE the story!
*Subscribes*
UPDATE SOON!
=P