This is a really good one-shot. You have a lot of detail, and you describe the people well. It's easy to catch up on what's happening and to whom its happening. Spelling and grammar is great, you write very good!
Of course, the things that happen in this story wouldn't happen IRL, but that's fanfiction, eh? ;] It's a really cute story, and it has a really cute ending! Good job!
Of course, the things that happen in this story wouldn't happen IRL, but that's fanfiction, eh? ;]
It's a really cute story, and it has a really cute ending!
Good job!
xo Tee