November 13th, 2009 at 10:44pm
I really quite like this.
It was well written and didn't reveal everything in the first paragraph. Which I really like in a story, a bit of mystery is always good!
You stuck to the requirements perfectly. Thank you for writing this. I enjoyed it and it left me wondering what would happen next but not to a huge extent. The right amount. I also liked the tiny twist at the end. I don't know if you meant it to be a twist but it was to me.
Well done.
x
How the taste of the beer was bitter just as our ending. How it made me feel dizzy just like his touch, breath or kisses.
This was the best line, for me. It's sort of dreamy while still having an angry or depressed sound.
I love it.