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  • Blank Canvas.

    Blank Canvas. (100)

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    Its pretty good, but you might need to work on some of the dialogue, i really dont think mikey and gee would talk like some of the lines you wrote in. but otherwise, i like it
    August 5th, 2007 at 03:28pm
  • Tainted

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    Oooh, I like this so far!
    Please continue with it.
    xo.
    August 5th, 2007 at 03:26pm
  • explosive light

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    i almost cried reading that.
    update more please!
    August 5th, 2007 at 03:25pm
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