Thank you for the venom - Comments

i really like this story. update soon plz.

awesome story what was it based on?
I would continue to read this continue with the good work ^^
SENGOSHA

wow. That was REALLY good! Continue it Emmy! More more more!!
(Can Maura come visit ya? And Brenda? lolzz)

*Sakura-chan*

This is extremely good! I especially loved the intro!

More soon?

thats really good.

Thats really good!

hhm..she should have drank more water! it's good so far, great similies being used there! only thing i noticed is the paragraph structure, as formentioned, a new speaker needs a new paragraph to distinguish who is is saying what. other than that, it's great.

I love it.
:D
It is very descriptive. Also it has good talking, and it has paragraphs, Yay! Paragraphs!

Awsome xd!
i love the setting!

I like the way you write.
Update soon!

Good Job!

=] I liked your description simple, but filling.

Just look out for little spellings && pushing words together.
<3
XoXo

ohhh I really like it more please?

o.O whoa. I'm definitely subscribing. 'Nuff said.

yay, you wrote more to it!
see, you can write. now all you need to do is keep it going. and hopefully all these comments will inspire you to keep doing so.
xo

It's really good so far Em. It's just, well, you need to work on forming the paragraphs better. Along with the dialouge. It's good, it's just hard to read because it's not formed in the usual way. If you need an editor, you can ask me.
Otherwise, it was really good! :D

*Sakura-chan*

yayyy i like it alot i can't wait for more!!

Ooh this is good :D
i like it, *subscribes*
update soon please! :}

Ooh! Suspense! I love it!
It's well written and has no grammar mistakes from what I see.
Keep it up!

You're only 12? Your writing says you're older...it had great grammar and no spelling from what I could see. The only thing that could be fixed is your paragraph structure. Every time someone talks it should be a new paragraph.
Other than that, it was good.
I think I'll continue reading.

wow thats really good keep writin -.-