One word: brilliant :D
July 25th, 2011 at 06:26pm
This story had a really interesting storyline. I liked the bond between Harry and Alice. That was something interesting that I had never seen done before. I also like the romance side-plots. The tension between Draco and Alice gives them a relationship that most people can really relate to. I like that Oliver was the slightest bit awkward. It was cute. Also, I adore Ron as the comic relief. He's great. :) Overall, I think that the idea was really interesting and different. I liked that Alice was like a protective older sister, and the ending you had was cute. In terms of editing and formatting, I would suggesting maybe getting a beta who could help you perfect your writing so that the format is correct under mibba standards and so that you can fix some of the minor grammatical errors that you have. Just so you can make your writing better especially because dialogue is really difficult to discern when it is in a large block of text.
And, that, in one supersized comment, is commentary on all 27 chapters. :)
