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  • aubs

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    Wow, good but distrubing.
    July 20th, 2009 at 02:52am
  • nerdy_

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    Clap Wow. I'm impressed.

    You tend to use semicolons in places that don't really need them. Like there's one sentence in the first paragraph that would have been fine with just a comma. But this is no big deal. I think your writing style is very sophisticated. (Besides, most of them were correctly used.)

    You have a nice vocabulary. Impede. Inevitable. Chasm. I love words like that.
    July 14th, 2009 at 01:54am
  • Fool.Proof

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    wow, drammatic moch? I love drama.lol. You know, half way through it, I thought it waas Jac k and the beanstalk.
    But it was great
    July 13th, 2009 at 12:06am
  • Midnight Ruby

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    really disturbing but the details are amazing
    July 12th, 2009 at 08:48am
  • Memory Lane.

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    Wow. That was really good! & extremely detailed kinda disturbing though... lol.
    Really, really good though!
    July 12th, 2009 at 02:02am
  • Emmerz

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    Wow!!! :D
    That was really really good!!!
    July 12th, 2009 at 12:15am
  • little motorkitty;

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    Wow, I loved this. It was really, really original and well written. The descriptions were amazing, I am honestly jealous. Excellent entry, well done Clap
    July 11th, 2009 at 10:47pm
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