Suspicious Minds - Comments

Absolutely amazing!!! :-D oo Emma is going to have to get over her socially awkward stage if she plans on getting Brian, who is one sexy piece of man haha. And Lola, i still am not sure what to think of her. Sometimes i think she is just goin to be a conniving bitch haha, but there is obviously more to her that ill see soon im sure.

Poor Emma, getting used liked that. :(
But who knows, maybe they'll grow to like each other.
amazing update!

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I don't even think she had breasts or a pussy at that stage!

God help him!

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Hi, I'm Lola, nice to meet you.

Liar. You only want to use poor Ems!:grr:
But I still like Lola... :twisted:
Great update.

"I won’t give up," I murmured and popped another Jelly bean into my mouth. "Christ needs learn his place below me!”

I'm so surprised no one made a comment about not being surprised that she liked it on top... it's the first thing that popped into my head! Am I perveted? hahaha

Aww.. Matt and Val broke up. That's sad... and a very difficult position for Emma to be in if she's close with Val. But I guess stuff like that just happens.... haha.

I almost choked on the huge ball the multiple jelly beans had formed inside of my mouth and with great pain managed to swallow it, "hi…" I choked out finally.

Poor girl! I've done that before, but with red frogs (a lolly, not literally red frogs) and it really hurt! hahaha.

So I take it there's sexual tension between Brian and Lola? They're always checking each other out... so really, why wouldn't Padge think something is going on? I'm not defending his fuckwit ways, but yeah... so far, they've checked each other out a hell of a lot. hahaha.

Good update, girls! Looking forward to more soon =)

who cares if it's innapropiate, just say it!
this one makes my like lola a little more.

Hi! Ok I like it better how you have both point of views in a chapter rather than two. Idk why I just like how I dot have to wait to see what happened or the cause etc...

P.S. Matt is a very fuckable guy. I can't blame lola.

so, Lola might share the bus with Matt, the rest of the guys and Emma ?
sounds fun =D
Loved the update and I can't wait for more!

This story is so amazing that I'm going to subscribe to it right now.
These girls sure are similar in more ways than none. Well I can't wait to see what happens next.

Yay! I loved it! Keep up the good work girls...
Can't wait for more.... =D

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Hey, K. First chapter was incredible I love the detail and I can relate to Emma. Nervous scared and clinging to things she feels comfortable with, aka Her brother. Now who's her love interest? Zacky am I correct? Or is it Brian? Because if it is and Brian likes Lola who likes Matt who is willing to protect her sister from anything...so i'm not sure.

Chapter two was just as great, gave me insight on the whole comotion. Matt, the horny bastard, Is already hard for Lola and seems intent on getting that piece of ass. Hopefully, for Lola, Getting it not fucking it. I laughed reading when she denied him anal. Pfft who cares we all know its good ol fucking the ORAL that is better...damn UK people. Wanting the freaky' shit. But the story was great and I deeply look forward to it

Great job, loves! At this point I'm exhausted as it's 1 am here and Cian's had colic all evening so I can't do a proper comment, but I will when I can think straight--promise!

AHHH I F-ING LOVED IT!!!! UPDATE SOON LOVEY!! YOU BOTH DID GREAT!!!!!!

Awesome start, I just had to subscribes!
I loved the first two chapters! can't wait for more :)

Ahhhhhh I am sooo fucking excited you guys. Both of you are amazing writers, so I can only expect the best from your crazy, dark minds. :-D The first chapters were excellent, since you got insight into each girls mind and a little background on why they act a certain way. Continue to rock this shit out both of you!!

Awesome start guys! I subscribed immediately.
I'm suprised with Em... I would've rip my brother into pieces if he forgot about me! And she took it so calmly
I have a feeling that Padge is going to cause more trouble:evil:
Em and Lola are so different and yet, the same at times...
Can't wait for more (:

So, I thought I'd give my thoughts on the first before moving onto the second, just coz it's easier than trying to remember... haha.

I'm surprised Emma handled Matt forgetting her so calmly... I would've thrown a major tantrum if my bother did that... and he'd owe me so majorly that he'd be at my beck and call for at least a month... if he ever said 'no' i'd be like "Oh, but remember how you forgot..."

"Hasn’t you mother told you where the babies come from?"

I think that was quite funny, personally. hahaha. Nice little smartass quip. hahaha.

Her past is intriguing... I'm really looking forward to finding out what happened to her. I also love her relationship with the boys individually.. and that she doesn't get along perfectly with all of them.. that's different to how stories normally are, so it's good :)

Well, this little triangle/square with 'lola', Brian, Padge and Matt looks like it's gonna be interesting, to say the least... hahaha.

Second chapter!

"Michael Padget! I am not letting you fuck my butt!"

Ummm.. okay. Not what I was expecting... I though maybe threesome.. but uh, okay. haha.

Her relationship with him is also interesting, although strained at best... though it makes you wonder why it wouldn't be if she's developing "wet spots" over another guy while her boyfriends concocting plans to bang her in the ass...

Wow... can't believe he just said that. Never thought i'd dislike, basically hate, Padge but I'm feeling mass amounts of disdain for him right now.

Huh.. well, getting dumped would never be fun.. but getting dumped with an audience? Wow, that's just a damn whale of a time! Yeah, dislike him... not sure how I feel about her so far, though...

Good start to the story, girls. Looks like it's gonna be an interesting one...

This is amazing, I love it already!
I'm subscribing. :)

i didn't read it ....now i have,
I like how they're so different, it keeps a nice balance in shyness/assertiveness...if that are words

woooh a new story,
Brian's jerk , I love it!
I'm curious about the next chapter for lola's pov, she reminds me of one of my friends and if she's anything like her, there's going to be a shit load of drame in this story because of her xp

HOW FRIGGIN AWESOME ARE WE!!!???
I believe you described it this way earlier: "motherflipping awesome"
I hope you people have great fun with this, because Nuuba and me are having the time of our lives right now writing this story!