Shot Through the Heart. - Comments

  • Firstly, I like your take on the word. It was a lot different to what I expected, and that's good, because that's what I wanted.

    The sex was very well written for only a second attempt, well done. I liked the description of how Lindsey loved guns, and her obsession and fascination of them was portrayed. I liked how the ending of chapter 1 matched the ending of chapter 2, it worked well.

    Sex hair looks awesome on him.
    I'd just like to say, I bet it does! :tehe:

    Anyway, well done on your efforts. It was very well written. :cute:
    July 18th, 2009 at 12:39am
  • Dude.
    That was hot.
    Like, amazing actually considering it's your second attempt at writing sex.
    I loved it. In Love

    PS- you're so going to win. :file:
    July 17th, 2009 at 10:28pm