August 1st, 2009 at 06:51pm
Despite what Bert did I couldn't help but feel for him, knowing that he knew it was a mistake and that he felt so horrible about it. Really loved the bit of Italian in here.
This story was really amazing. So sad and so sweet at the same time. Wonderfully done.
I'd just like to point out that I do the same thing in Italian, when I don't want to let people know what I'm feeling. My own little way of connecting there.
Also, reading the summary, I was convinced Bert had killed someone...
the chemistry between them was fatal. Okay, yeah, amazing.
“You’ll come home, Gee” Bert mumbled into the empty room, before adding doubtfully “Won’t you?” Right there was where I realized either he would die or Gerard would come back. Touching. I felt emotionally involved the whole time, very good writing.
“You have to come back.” Bert croaked, cradling the pillow to his side. “I’ll keep it all warm for you; It’ll be like you never went away.” I did awe right there, thank you very much.
Every second, every minute, and every hour – Bert would stare at their bedroom door until he would see a figure standing in the doorway. Way to break my heart. Amazing, the way you described his time in that room.
“There’s one thing I do know,” Gerard smiled, as he led Bert back to the bed, “If it hurts this much – then it must be love.” Great note to end it on.