Girls Do What They Want - Comments

That was such a good oneshot!
I loved it!

I thought that was a very touching story. I'm glad that he was able to accept the enivitable at the end. GREAT JOB

I wish you'd write more :[

Hello! Thank you for entering No Rules!
And thank you for linking to my contest in the summary!
No one else has done that yet, so that was a nice surprise. :cute:
Ok, just to warn you there may be con-crit in my comment.
But not nasty. :)

Lovely beginning - not the standard clichéd opening with a description of the self!

The bit beginning The wound in my chest seemed to open further... has some odd spacing, you may want to go back and check that out.

Aw, that made me cry.
Soooo beautiful towards the end.

Nothing else to write, it was so well written.
Right, I'll try and clear up those tears.
Check back at the contest page later this evening for the results!

I see you have a lot of fans, cheering you on for the contest.
:D That's cool.

Anyway, I thought it was excellent.
The details that you put into it made it feel like I was actually there. I could feel what John felt.
I loved that he threw the ring into the ocean. I thought that was a great idea. Though, I'd kinda be sad to throw all the money away. Haha.
I didn't see any mistakes. Except, I'm really bad at looking for those kind of things. And, I see someone already helped you with that part. :D
Anyway, I thought it was really sad. It was definately on the Heart Throbbing Scale.
Excellent job.
:D

Aw, that was really sad, but cute. Good luck :)

that was so amazing!
so sad but amazing nonetheless :]]

Aw! This is so sweet in a really saddening way. I love it! And good luck to you in the contest(:

awww!
my eyes are watering! this was so sad, but very good :]

That was so sad. Good, but depressing. Jeez, just make me all down. No I'm kidding, but it was really good. You made me feel John's pain. Why you gotta be so mean to him? No, again joking.I liked it. Just wait till August now :]

that was amazing (: saddening.. but goood!

"Promise me that is something bad were ever to happen to one of us, heaven forbid....

Just change the 'is 'to 'if' in the first line.

I felt her small hands wrap around my waist and I smiled ad breath tickled my neck.

And the 'ad' to 'as' I'm guessing?

Just to help with the grammar.

I love it <3 no joke it is fantastic!
I even had tears in my eyes during the end.
Hope you win!! (: