Suicide Season - Comments

So sad :(

But such a good story :)

]': awwwwww *hugs Oli*

I loved it. It absolutely took my breath away.

Your writing is lovely.

Terrific job! :cute:

I loved it. A totally new side to Oliver Sykes. A sensitive side. Lovely. (:

The story you wrote was absolutely amazing! :) That was great and just fantastic! :) You're an excellent writter!

Thanks for reminding me :)
Here's what I thought:
Plot-line: Amazing. I don't know what else to say. I loved the fact that you think she's not going to do anything because she promised, and she tells Oli that she thinks she's in love with him. It's like a huge unexpected outcome. I loved that your story wasn't predictable.

Intriguing Content: I was hooked since I read the description on the summary page. I was trying to make predcitions throughout the entire one-shot, but after every sentence, I had to change my prediction because I would be proven wrong. I loved knowing what was going on in Oliver's head, and I think you tied the song into the story perfectly.

Writing: You are an extremely talented writer. There's only one thing I would suggest for you to consider: Mibba is stupid, and I noticed by the way your paragraphs are laid out, you type it in the proper way. Like, indents on your paragraphs and such. Mibba doesn't show indents, so that's why a lot of people double space their paragraphs. It's easier to read that way. You don't have to do that, but it's just easier for the readers. I didn't see any spelling mistakes, I don't think there were any grammar mistakes, so everything looked great!

Overall, you did an excellent job! Thank you for entering the contest, and good-luck!

Oh. My. God.

I can't even completely evaluate this right now, because you've left me in a state of shock.

That. Was. Amazing.

You better feel proud, because you just made me cry. That's amazing. I've only cried for two stories, ever, yours included.

I'll post my full evaluation when I can think clearly.

That was amazing!