hey~ I noticed that throughout the story, thoughts are not distinguished from the general writing. why don't you use italics, or single quotes? it would help the reader read more efficiently
Great :D Pleeease update your story! I didn't know you made a sequel till about 20 minutes ago, but I love it already (: what' alice's prophecy? Please write more xD
ch1- yay SIRIUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ch3- hehe draaaaaaaaaaaaama. ch5- alice *snort* possesed by voldemort *cough* has extra power*snicker* turns Draco on OH MY! ch7- aww james, just like her father. warms my heart. <3 ch9- quite dull. (wow, I've been commenting all the odd chapters and I JUST noticed. I'm slow TnT) ch14- ooooooooh buuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuurn. ^.^ ch16- MOTEDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD!!! (sorry I need to stop the lame american terms) ch18- unexpected, but a little dull. more action than usual, i know, but i expected more. u can do it.