Dances With Petals - Comments

These damned descriptors make me look bad. Therefor, they're absolutely 100 X better than mine. Colorful, touching all of my senses, vivid. I've subscribed, because I hope to read more. Beautiful work.

I love the way you portray Brooke it's so sweet he has her to occupy his mind :D
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Wow.. I love the way you describe your characters and scenery...
And Brooke sounds soo sweet!!
I love it :mrgreen: Write more soon!

i loved it (:
finally someone gives detail to the surroundings, and how the charecters feel (evn though i dont have much room to talk)
but yea, i'll deffinetly stick with this story till its done
glad you told me about it :]

I feel to compliment the perfect length of the background song in part 5, it lasted exactly as long as it took me to read the chapter ^^ It also moved very well with the story then following the mood perfectly.
It was almost a magical experience :D and much of that thanks to your writing too.

This really impressed me, it felt like I was reading a book. A great book that drags me in and makes me forget everything else. I love how descriptive you write, and the characters all seems so alive.
The only small thing I think is to over the top is how Holly was described at least two times using practically the exact same words. But that's really just a minor detail as I love her as a character already.
And just to let you know, everything I read here on Mibba will now be compared to this. And I honestly doubt I will find another story that drags me in the way this one does.

:D
Tat waz very good!
Thanks for reading my books! It made my day.

My goodness that was powerful.
I had to stop in the middle of the chapter to comment this
And the music makes it seem so real, like im watching a movie
im off to subscribe now(:
Update as soon as possible(:

well i loved it until john was in it : )

The forest sound's pretty amazing to me from how you described it! :D I can't wait for more soon, i'm loving it.

Ooh, still liking it a lot!! :D I like how you described the forest as something out of a Disney movie (I'm a sucker for old Disney movies <3). I wish I could write imagery as well as you do. I'm jealous! ;) Can't wait for more!

haha i wanna sleep in rose petals.
that forest sounds so beautiful too <3
keep writing =)

I was speechless after I read those 2 chapters. There was so much detail in it and I could almost see everything clearly in my mind :D I hope you write more.

-Alexa

Wow. This is really great, and the music matches it... Great job and keep up the good work. : )

It's very descriptive and colorful. I love how you detailed everything and made us aware to Brooks surroundings. I can't wait for the next chapter.

As always with stories,
I didn't really like the first chapter.
(I'm not a big person for introductions)
But don't get me wrong.
The details really made the story stand out.
And I enjoyed chapter two a lot.
Brooke's reactions to everything make him truely realistic.
And I'm a sucker for good characters. =]
Can't wait for the next chapter ~

Your narration is gorgeous! You write with such rich imagery that the scene plays out for the reader like they're watching a movie . . . I feel like I'm right there, and I can see Brooke (love that name for a boy, by the way) so clearly, especially in the forest with the girl . . . I can't wait for more!

Wow
that was breath taking. It really was. I felt like I was in the story, and wow..
Just wow.
Beautiful, very beautiful. It was so enchanting. I love it.
Great job.
:] you'll be a very famous mibbian lol

Well, I liked the story.
I also liked how you explain the surroundings and gave much detail to most things.
Good job, can't wait for more. =]

wow.
update please! :mrgreen: