You're So Much More Than That - Comments

i must sayyyy i'm VERYY excited about this story :)

Okay quick question or comment really, anyway, I just started reading your story and I was wondering about some parts that didn’t quite make since to me. Okay so in chapter 5 there is this:

“Alright” I said and went to the left door and saw stairs I looked back and saw Draco standing there.

“Aren’t you coming?” I asked him, I didn’t want to go by myself.

“Can’t” he said.

“Can’t why not?” I asked him.

“Dumbledore put a spell on the stairs, if any guy was to step a foot on those stairs it will turn into a slide” he told me. I was shocked did they actually think the guys would come rape the girls.

And as I kept reading, I noticed in chapter 17 this happens:

After breakfast and walked to our classes since we were in the same classes we sat beside each other holding hands. The day went by fast and so did dinner. And the next thing I knew I was walking out of his bathroom in my cotton candy pj bottoms and the same matching top.

I guess what I’m asking is what happened to the spell that Dumbledore put up? How can all of a sudden she is allowed into Draco’s room? I’m sorry I just got lost during reading that part.

That's it, thanks for listening to me. Bye!

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OMG 10 STARS!
Thanks to you guys. God i love you guys! (in a friendly matter of course) Thanks so much.

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Please remember that I'm just trying to give constructive criticism. I'm not trying to be a b**** or anything.

The plot seems good although it is a bit of a cliche.

Please, try using for example instead of like. There's also a difference between women and woman.

As I reader, I would like to know more about the setitng. It really helps to set the story for a reader to understand some of the backround and location. It's really distracting from the story when a reader asks his or herself questions about a story that can easily be explained right at the beginning.

Please, please, please go back and fix all of your grammatical errors. I have found some errors in just the first chapter that you have rewritten. It's very distracting. Also, please remember to use a punctuation mark at the end of all your sentences.

Draco Malfoy is out of character. He is not the type of boy to help somebody up who had fallen down. He would probably just stand or sit there laughing at him or her or just give the person who fell a dirty look. He also is not the kind of boy who would be honestly open about, well, anything except for his hatred. It's like you don't know his character. It seems as if you're just giving him the personality and characteristics that you would want Draco Malfoy to have.

I apologize if you take this the wrong way. I really am sorry if it came off as mean. I'm just trying to be an open critic.

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Finally! you haven't updated in like forever! it was a good filler inner chapter though!

lol, thanks melmel :)

OGMOGMGOGMG TANYA !!! deffffffff's makes up for it ! i love this update ! so cute !!!!! draco + emma foreverrr.

FORGIVEEEE :) I LOVE DRACO . OGMGOMG NOM NOM NO.

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I don't think she should forgive draco, hes a poop! but on the other hand it wouldn't be a love stary without him soooooo they should make up! ( excuse my awful spelling)

Chapter 22 was killer!!!
I'm a little confused because in the beginnig you said the only boy she had kissed was Draco but in chapter 16 you said she had kissed other boyfriends. I don't really know.

Anyway, I like the story and I'll let you know if you win the contest!!!

HE BETTER NOT DO HER THAT WAY!
But btw...where is Draco anyway? And why is Ron so...empty headed!?
Seriously, Tanya, keep typing!

:) Yes another cliff hanger. Thats what i'm good at. lol Sorry melmel, but youll understand in future chapter why he did it.

OMG! another cliff hanger! lol lovin it! :)

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lol thanks :) Melmel. I forgot what the thing was called. so the thing you pee on. :D

Thank you:)