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Saint. (450)

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One Shot For One Shot (:

Well, I totally wasn't expecting this. The geek inside me went

instantly.

I loved how this was like. . . a train of thought? It was really sad, I totally know how the narrator is feeling.

He closed his eyes and jumped, praying that he’d fly. But he wasn’t a superhero, he was nobody. The last line is just so powerful. I really liked this, even though it was short (:

August 21st, 2009 at 04:33pm

fun ghoul fez. (100)

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One shot for Oneshot, although I'll probably do another because this is short. :XD

I really liked this, it was short, honest and straight to the point. I'm a sucker for people referencing superheroes in their stories so I loved how he was comparing himself to Peter Parker. Quite enjoyable. :cute:

August 4th, 2009 at 06:02am

nearly witches; (100)

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I'm pretty sure it wasn't just my dorky superhero fan-ness that made me like this so much.

I really, really liked it; the whole concept & yes, the Spiderman references, & especially the end, because I literally went ':cheese:' when I got to it.

It was really great, & honest, & I love honesty in stories.

August 3rd, 2009 at 07:45pm

The Color Abi (300)

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Wow. That was extremely powerful Polly.
I loved how you used Spiderman in reference [is a big Spiderman fan as you know]
I can only find one fault with it really;

Shit happens and stuff hurts, and we’ve gotta take the punches and the beatings and just wait, and hope that something good is going to happen. But what if nothing good ever happens?

I wouldn't have used the word stuff; it really doesn't sound right in that context to me.

I love this, I don't know why you doubted it.
It captures how Spiderman glamorises the hero gets the girl well. :cute:
Well done

July 24th, 2009 at 12:04am