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  • Ora-Witch-Dreamer

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    update
    October 28th, 2011 at 05:34pm
  • Apple Scruff

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    I felt such a surge for Alison's parents. Especially her mom. It must be so hard and I understand why she would be blaming herself for all of this. =(
    Tehe, now you have me singing that song! She Came In Through The Bathroom Window. XD
    I hope Alison escapes!
    October 10th, 2009 at 11:32pm
  • Sailor Meranda

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    I am liking this. It has me curious; curiousity is good for a reader it leaves them wanting to know needing to know more. : ) I really am enjoying it and I do believe I will subscribe. <---sorry if anything is mispelt my spelling is off tonight. : (
    October 6th, 2009 at 08:19am
  • Apple Scruff

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    RUN ALISON, RUN! RUN FOR YOU LIFE! And Emma too!

    Fuck. I seriously hope that window is unlocked. I want the two to get out of there! Rose reminds me of a hypnotist or whatever. o_o I wouldn't want to be controlled by her at all.

    SO RUN ALISON! RUN, RUN, RUN AS FAST AS YOU CAN!
    September 28th, 2009 at 06:10pm
  • Apple Scruff

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    Hmm, I rather like Alan's ability. It adds a nice twist to things. Like Alison won't be able to get away with merely acting like she's "broken". I liked that word you used!
    I understand what you meant by that it wasn't planned at all haha. I do that a lot in my stories. Just put in things at the spur of the moment. =p
    Well anywho, so now like ... is Alison under Slick's wing? I thought ... wait a minute lol I'm a bit confused. Isn't Alan the one who kinapped her? o_o
    This whole things sounds like Alison's been taken into some type of business. You know how they have human-trading thingies or something like that?
    September 22nd, 2009 at 06:26pm
  • The Colour of Music

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    this is a good story .. i like the way the plot line is moving :P
    im looking forward to updayes :D
    September 22nd, 2009 at 01:32pm
  • so sedated.

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    I like it (-:
    Can't wait for the next chapter.
    September 22nd, 2009 at 11:11am
  • imagineforlennon

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    I loved the introduction to Alison's mom. But I do agree with the above. While she is important, try not to focus too much on her. You should stay more with Alison and her situation since that's the main thing happening here. But I wouldn't mind a few snippets here and there about her mom. =)
    I desperately want to get to Alison, so I hope you're posting soon!
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    Sorry about the over-due comment. I went away for the weekend.
    Oh thats ok!!!
    Don't worry most of the story will focus on Alison. I've had a few ppl tell me they don't want to hear about her mom, but i just flash back to her to add dynamic (? lol) interest to my story. Plus theres a few hints of things when its in the "mom" part that come up later......but you'll eventually read that! lol
    September 22nd, 2009 at 04:48am
  • Apple Scruff

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    I loved the introduction to Alison's mom. But I do agree with the above. While she is important, try not to focus too much on her. You should stay more with Alison and her situation since that's the main thing happening here. But I wouldn't mind a few snippets here and there about her mom. =)
    I desperately want to get to Alison, so I hope you're posting soon!
    P.S.
    Sorry about the over-due comment. I went away for the weekend.
    September 21st, 2009 at 05:40pm
  • CloudieRain

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    i like it! reading the chapter in the moms perspective makes me wonder if the girls mom is gonna kick some ass or something. SUPER MOM IN HEELS! lol jk maybe shell meet a guy
    September 20th, 2009 at 06:00am
  • NeverShoutTana

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    of course i'll continue to read it, i'm not giving up on the story :)
    September 19th, 2009 at 10:44am
  • imagineforlennon

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    ehhh i'm not too interested in hearing more about her parents...one chapter about her mom is enough. I think you should continue on about the main character. It takes away the interest of the story when i read about her mom. I want to read about the kidnapping and everything
    Oh Thanks so much for taking an interest to my story. I hate to disappoint you but i have the basic outline of the story written out and the flashing back and forward is a major part. I do hope you continue to read though!
    September 19th, 2009 at 10:26am
  • NeverShoutTana

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    ehhh i'm not too interested in hearing more about her parents...one chapter about her mom is enough. I think you should continue on about the main character. It takes away the interest of the story when i read about her mom. I want to read about the kidnapping and everything
    September 19th, 2009 at 10:14am
  • NeverShoutTana

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    update soon huns :)
    September 19th, 2009 at 09:47am
  • Apple Scruff

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    Oh. Crap.
    Those are like ... the two coherent words ringing through my mind right now.
    I laughed when I read the nickname she gave her kidnapper. Bipolar lol. Well, it does seem to fit, doesn't it?
    I can't imagine someone telling me to stick close to them in order to avoid the "worst" of it.
    I'm really wanting to see what happens next. Update soon?
    September 15th, 2009 at 05:52pm
  • Apple Scruff

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    Alright! I am commenting now before I have to leave again. >.>

    Chapter 1:
    I thought it was a very good introduction to your story. I like your chacater Alison. I would totally be speechless and angry if someone rubbed it in my face that they're dating my crush. Amber sounds annoying lol.

    Chapter 2:
    It had me scared like hell. I can't imagine what it would be like to get kidnapped, wake up in some strange car with some stange guy that yells and hits me. Damn, I live close to moutains .... makes me scared haha.

    All in all, I found these chapter interseting so far and I definitely want you to keep going. Update this soon! I shall subcribe and wait not-so-patiently.x) I've never read a story of this sort, but I'd like to keep reading!
    September 10th, 2009 at 05:42pm
  • Brittney.Blackout

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    It's good.
    Keep going :]
    July 28th, 2009 at 10:52pm
  • GemalemPixie

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    this next chapter is good =)
    keep it up
    July 27th, 2009 at 02:30pm
  • imagineforlennon

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    dynam!te:
    Oh, and, I forgot..... :)

    You don't need to put "Chapter 1: School" as the title. Just "School" is fine, since it is already labeled as 1. on the summary page.

    There is no rating by users. The rating system is determined by the first comment you get on your story, by # of subscribers, and by # of readers. So tell us to "subscribe and comment!" instead. -wink wink-
    Thanks so much for the critique! I was wondering can i edit my first chapter so its more appealing to the eyes? Anyway thanks!!!! I appreciate it. :D
    July 25th, 2009 at 11:55pm
  • GemalemPixie

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    You asked me to read so i did =)
    This is really good though maybe a little hard to read as said before no spacing of the dialouge.
    but well done for the exellent writting that went into this cant wait for an update.
    x
    July 25th, 2009 at 10:26am