update
October 28th, 2011 at 05:34pm
Oh thats ok!!!
- Abbey Road Studios:
- I loved the introduction to Alison's mom. But I do agree with the above. While she is important, try not to focus too much on her. You should stay more with Alison and her situation since that's the main thing happening here. But I wouldn't mind a few snippets here and there about her mom. =)
I desperately want to get to Alison, so I hope you're posting soon!
P.S.
Sorry about the over-due comment. I went away for the weekend.
Oh Thanks so much for taking an interest to my story. I hate to disappoint you but i have the basic outline of the story written out and the flashing back and forward is a major part. I do hope you continue to read though!
- NeverShoutTana:
- ehhh i'm not too interested in hearing more about her parents...one chapter about her mom is enough. I think you should continue on about the main character. It takes away the interest of the story when i read about her mom. I want to read about the kidnapping and everything
Thanks so much for the critique! I was wondering can i edit my first chapter so its more appealing to the eyes? Anyway thanks!!!! I appreciate it. :D
- dynam!te:
- Oh, and, I forgot..... :)
You don't need to put "Chapter 1: School" as the title. Just "School" is fine, since it is already labeled as 1. on the summary page.
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