Nothing Changes. - Comments

I love this! I don't usually read original fiction, but I'm starting to read more of it. And I'm glad I did, because this, this is great. I am in love with your story. :)

I hope you keep updating it 'cause I love this. A lot. :)

Did you have someone make this layout for you? I feel as though I've already read a story with this exact layout, but it might just be really close? Anyways. Your writing is very unattractive(?). I don't know if that's a good word. But your main character's narration isn't up to par in my book. She is very "this, this, this." She doesn't keep anything in a closet to attract the reader to find out more. She tells you her life story in the first three paragraphs. Keep writing.

Hell. :) Well, let's get started shall we?

I think your writing skills are excellent. :) No doubt about it. Your story pulled me in right from the start and that doesn't happen very often. I like the characters you created and your descriptions left me amazed. You did a pretty good job if you ask me. ;)

Well done! Keep on writing and share your beautiful and interesting imagination with me and your fans. :)

That was really good, I really enjoyed the beginning when you started out with the moving process. I would have to say though this story could use a bit more of like a narrative of the girls emotions, because I see you're trying to move fast with this story and that might help you out a bit with making it flow into that quick pattern. The Max Character seems very interesting and I am curious as to if he is a party boy or not, and along with the moving fast with them I would suggest a bit more of a "BAM!" feeling when they first met to get a point across to your readers that this is special. You have a great idea here and with a little more emotion put into it you will be fine an dandy:)

Sure, this is such a great story and I like it already. A lot.
The way Max gets to know Vee and shows that he likes her is cute and he seems to be so hot. I'd love to have a crush on him if he was real. Lol
Vee, at the other hand is cute too. I love her character and the whole 'not close to mom' thing is really my type.
Can you give a pict of Max too?
Keep update, I subscribed anyway :D

Yays... Even though it was short, I liked it.

I comment! :( Try commenting new people and asking them to read, it worked for me :]

Ooooh I like this. :]

Max sounds hot. ;P
Love the whole anti-mother attitude. XD I can relate.

Update soon. <3