Shit. This is rather good. I loved how you used your words. It's kind of funny too, how he put on the whole 'act.' I shall begin to read HP fics now... =]
-gasp- WOW. Totally didn't see that coming. At first, I couldn't help but think, "Ewww....Snape?" And then, with the twist, all I could think of was, "More?"
Meg you are too shy. You should really post more. I love the way you write and the words you use. I think your "love poison story" is different from others (and by that I mean better) because of that twist in the end, I loved it. Tbh I giggled with Tonks.
I usually don't read HP fanfics, but I've considered looking more into it since I've read this. :tehe:
I saw no errors, forgive me if there was, and it was nicely written. You write very...let's say: maturely. Maybe it's because I'm still under an HP infatuation 'spell', but I thought you wrote similar to Rowling. Sort of. The little twist at the end of chapter 2 was something I think was nicely done. You have a very 'professional' voice when you write. Hopefully that made sense. The words you chose were perfect.