A Bolt From the Blue - Comments

This was great, like everyone said, the point of view really added effect. The ending was amazing (I think all your endings are perfect) and it really added to the effect. If your one-shots are this amazing, I wonder what your stories are/would be like.

I really liked this, especially how you were describing it in a point-of-view that told us the character was already dead. It was the honest, raw truth - we really don't appreciate things until we're about to - or have already - lost them.

Just because it doesn’t usually happen doesn’t mean that it won’t happen, and nothing brought that home like lying there on the cold, wet ground, listening to the rain drumming around me.

Loved it. <3

The weather had cleared, and I was lucky to get one last glimpse of the sun. It had never looked so beautiful.

that was amazing.

I enjoyed this, particularly the last bit, the part where she started worrying about everything. It made me smile, even though it was a little sad as well.

Ehhhh. . . So, I totally had this nice comment written with typos, but then it didn't go through, and I don't remember what I wrote. I think there was an 'and' where there should've been an 'as' toward the beginning.

And the other was something about 'floor' sounding awkward when you're outside. . .

But either way, the story is great! It shows good insight to the things that seem important even in your final moments. How you're always thinking about someone else, even when you yourself need help.

Brilliant.

I liked it. I liked how you were telling it in the point of view of after the fact. I also liked how you had a little humor, such as the underwear not matching. That brought a smirk to my face. So, it was your first and it wasn't half bad. Good job. We'll wait for the results.