Aw dude, that was so sad. I felt really bad for Annie and her family, the line where Annie asked her sister if she was going to be okay was really sad. I had tears in my eyes, it was very effective.
even then her eyes shown brightly,
Shown should be shone, because you're talking about the past.
I really liked this, although I felt there should be some more description, but I just love description. It works the way it is though and it's very effective. Well done. :arms:
My God, this makes me feel like crying. I rarely comment stories because of my laziness, but this one just needed a response. I love your style of writing- it's not clouded by unnecessary descriptions or scenes; it's straight and to the point, which really allowed me to see and feel the pain Vanessa was going through.
Bottom line- great job. This was beautifully written.
One Shot for One Shot. . I cried, like literally. That was so sad and the details and how straightforward you had it just gets to the heart. Mine anyways. I was so touched by this because I went through this a few weeks ago . . Very touching one-shot :cute:.
even then her eyes shown brightly,
Shown should be shone, because you're talking about the past.
I really liked this, although I felt there should be some more description, but I just love description. It works the way it is though and it's very effective. Well done. :arms: