Broken Dolls Asylum - Comments

  • youngbae.

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    Cheese I really love this Za! Wow
    The way you write this is spectacular, and I'll be sure to subscribe so I can go back and read the rest of the story later. Con
    I love it that much. Coffee
    The characters are amazing, and the descriptions and dialogue...In Love Cheese It's like I'm actually there with Freddie, with the way you wrote it.

    Okay. Favorite parts time! Crazy
    Chapter One:
    “I can’t call you out if I don’t know your name. My name is Freddie.” I answered, twisting my hips towards him.

    “My name is Tom.” He smiled kindly. “And you are the first person to ever acknowledge that.”

    “It’s ‘because I’m not crazy.” I twirled one of my dark strands of hair, turning away.

    “I believe you.” He closed the door before he could hear my answer.

    “You’re the first.”


    I loved this little interaction between them. The way Freddie says "Your the first." in my head is so believable, with how the staff is described.

    No one ever knew who the person who woke us up at six in the morning was. I bet that if we did know, they would be already dead.

    That part made me grin and laugh evilly then laugh again cause that would so be true if someone were to wake me up at six every single morning. lmfao

    Chapter Two
    "Oh come on, you know that you’re my chocolate afro bear in the whole wide world times ten."

    Chocolate Afro bear. I luh you. lmfao

    This was really well written, and I shall go and subscribe now. <3
    May 8th, 2010 at 06:32am
  • medusacascade

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    You're officially in my favorite writers list.
    And I'm only on the first chapter.
    That's how super-duper awesome you are.
    And the fact that I love crazy shit :D
    March 31st, 2010 at 12:38am
  • bluedinocupcakes

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    I really love your story. It is wonderfully enjoyable. :] I hope to see more one day!
    March 3rd, 2010 at 02:42am
  • Situations.

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    YAYYYY!
    Izzy's back!<3
    This was a great update, and was much anticipated.
    I miss you,btww D;
    November 25th, 2009 at 09:59pm
  • carolina lynn.

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    absolutly breath taking story ^.^
    cant wait for more :D
    great job(:
    November 2nd, 2009 at 03:21am
  • fearlessgirl

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    This is so good! PLEASE update soon!!
    October 18th, 2009 at 10:58pm
  • Romantic Fistfights

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    FORGET MY LAST COMMENT!!!!
    im just stupid.
    September 27th, 2009 at 01:26pm
  • Romantic Fistfights

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    so, is freddie a boy?
    im confussed :S
    but i love the story.
    September 27th, 2009 at 01:17pm
  • fearlessgirl

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    This is so good!!!! Please update soon!!!!!!!!!!
    September 11th, 2009 at 11:21pm
  • mr. owl

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    Oh. I loved the kiss. Loved it. :D
    August 31st, 2009 at 04:47am
  • Djinnverso

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    Ozzie is the Joker to Freddie's Batman.

    The cookies to her milk... the bacon to her eggs... the butter to her toast.... I could go on all day!

    I lovett!
    August 31st, 2009 at 03:14am
  • Situations.

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    YAAAAYY!
    ;D
    I was mad, since it didn't tell me that BDA was updated, but this totallly made up for it(:
    That was so cute *-*
    I wish that could happen to me, so romantic.

    Excellente Iz
    :}
    August 31st, 2009 at 01:22am
  • j'adore.

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    I'm going to have to say that this is my all time favorite story on mibba.
    I am serious.
    It's amazing.
    Keep up the good work!
    :]
    August 28th, 2009 at 12:51am
  • mr. owl

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    Ozzie and her need to kiss. Now. (:
    August 25th, 2009 at 08:31am
  • Situations.

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    Woo!
    Yay for 3 stars*-*

    I love the bet at the end, haha.
    That's such a great idea.
    I think Ozzie will crack first xD

    More! :}
    August 24th, 2009 at 12:59am
  • mr. owl

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    Whoooo. I am back and I read it all. Are you ready for my monster of a comment? (: I really really love how well you describe everyone. Their outfits and stuff, like Mona and Valentine, and Ozzie. I also loved the description of Slaughter. And, the fac that you call her Slaughter (:

    It's also adorable how Mona speaks for Valentine all the time. She's a cutie pie.

    Your plot for this story is so original. I love it to pieces. The insane asylum, the killing of Freddie's grandma, the arsenic with Ozzie, just tons and tons of amazing ideas all threaded together. I love it all.

    I also found the part where Freddie untied her clothes and told that guy that she had sex with him very amusing. Cause, he believed her (:

    It's adorable how Tom covers for Freddie all of the time. I feel bad for him :( I wish he could have gone with them. Anyhwo.

    "Oh God. I shouldn't even be telling you this. I swear, each time I talk to you, I fear for my pay check."

    He wrapped an arm around my shoulder as I shrugged him off. “I said a second not second base.”


    Those two sentences seriously made me laugh. Not that they are the only ones that did, just that they were the funniest (:

    I do have one tiny thing that is bothering me though, and please don't hit me for expressing my unwanted opinion.. (:

    When you do flashbacks, instead of putting them in single quotes, you shoud make them italic.

    I got all confused and what not :/ hahaha

    All in freaking all, this story is fucking amazing and I find it extremely refreshing to read. I love it all. And I really wanna know what happens with everyone. If they meet up again, or what not.

    So, please up date as soon as you can. I'm waiting for it (:
    August 17th, 2009 at 04:08pm
  • Djinnverso

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    BDA: The three initials that always brighten my day. lol

    TO FOREWARN THEE, IZ!! I'm hoping for a romantic moment between Ozzie and Freddie sometime...
    August 17th, 2009 at 03:44am
  • Situations.

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    <3
    I love the cockroach part, hehee^-^
    This is great! They made it out, yay!(:
    August 16th, 2009 at 11:01pm
  • mr. owl

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    Oi Doll. This is rather amazing. I'd love to stay up and read the rest of it, but I'm almost postiive my ma would be thrown into HRC if she caught me on the computer again. (:

    I subscribed and I'll be sure to come back and read the rest.
    August 16th, 2009 at 08:46am
  • Djinnverso

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    OZZZZEEEE

    Ez beautamous. <<3333333

    Great story.
    August 12th, 2009 at 06:28am