August 25th, 2009 at 05:48pm
Second time I read this, and it was just as good. YOUHAVESUPERWRITINGDESCRIPTIVEIMAGERYSUPERHEROPOWEREPICNESS :file: and I'm jealous of it. I seriously couldn't tell what part is my favourite, I love every inch of this one-shot.
You have a way with words. Your talent pwns shakespeares.
So, yeah.
I LOVED IT :cheese: :yah
The cream-carpeted floors are dripping with paint... Wait, what? How can floors drip with paint???
The cream-carpeted floors are dripping with paint; the scarlets and gingers of a sunset forming on the rug. Sketches are scribbled on the sheets; of meadows and animals, grazing grasses sweet. They’re her escape, gateway to the world, because she doesn’t go out anymore, doesn’t even think it. Gah, too much puncuation. The commas and semi-colons make me eyes hurt. But when I did finish reading this paragraph, I loved it.(:
Other than this, I can't find anything else wrong. The plot and concept were so good. I wish this would've contniued.