:O Here's what I thought: Plot-line: Wow, that was strange. In a good way! This story was really great! At first, I was like 'what is going on?' Because of the deal with the mom, but everything turned out greatly!
Intriguing Content: At first I wasn't super intrigued, but tomorrow the middle I started to get more and more interested. It was a great turn out, and a great shock. I didn't expect her to die!
Writing: There were only a couple punctuation errors, but I didn't see any spelling errors. You're a really good writer.
Overall, it was awesome! Thank you for entering the contest, and good-luck!
Here's what I thought:
Plot-line: Wow, that was strange. In a good way! This story was really great! At first, I was like 'what is going on?' Because of the deal with the mom, but everything turned out greatly!
Intriguing Content: At first I wasn't super intrigued, but tomorrow the middle I started to get more and more interested. It was a great turn out, and a great shock. I didn't expect her to die!
Writing: There were only a couple punctuation errors, but I didn't see any spelling errors. You're a really good writer.
Overall, it was awesome! Thank you for entering the contest, and good-luck!