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  • peridol8120

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    i loved it!!
    awesome one-shot :D
    December 30th, 2009 at 04:07am
  • TheCoreysGirl

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    This is fantastic! I like it. :)
    December 29th, 2009 at 05:57am
  • insanity reigns;

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    This was great, it was very well written. :) I was looking for a MJ story, I'm glad I came across yours :)

    Dirty Diana is my favorite song by him, so that was a plus too ;)
    September 26th, 2009 at 03:51am
  • Mrs. Ramos

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    It was good(: I liked it<3
    August 17th, 2009 at 07:44pm
  • Mat Devine

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    Entry review
    The banner worked really well and I liked it very much :cute:
    I like the beginning, it makes me wonder who this woman is and who she is strutting over to.
    The description of how she walks definately shows me what kind of person she is and it goes on well throughout the chapter.
    you don't need a capital s when you say "she wanted" in italics :cute:
    I like how you incorporated the lyrics into the chapter, although it makes it obvious that your story is purely based on the lyrics to the song. Which isn't a bad thing I just had to mention it :cute:
    "The young man carefully took Diana's hands and placed it by her side, away from his withering, wanting body." :lmfao she's good.
    She clearly knows how to get any man she wants and it is clear from your description that she knows he power over men.
    "A small smile crept up to her face as he did his signature crotch-grab." :lmfao
    "She gave the bodyguard a wink as she walked past him. She saw him blush and she internally laughed." A rather too easy way to get to Michael perhaps?
    "My girl's at home...She's probably worried." He replied, not stopping Diana from the ecstacy he was being given." :lmfao you go girl!
    "Michael's anger for Diana dwelled away and they both got lost in the kiss they shared as they continued on." I'm liking this ending :cute: it goes well with the character!
    I enjoyed reading this In Love Thank you!
    August 2nd, 2009 at 03:45pm
  • starid09

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    Cool one shot, I really liked it.
    August 1st, 2009 at 12:42am
  • LuvelyBeatlegirl13

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    awesome! i seriously love it you are an awesome writer dear.
    July 31st, 2009 at 08:06pm
  • thelovely

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    that was good.. it fit the song very well
    July 31st, 2009 at 07:37pm
  • XxVengeancexX

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    Wow Love it Clap Dance
    July 31st, 2009 at 06:34pm
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