May 15th, 2012 at 05:47am
Bleeding Heart - Comments
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Missed this story was one of my first favorites on Mibba love itApril 27th, 2012 at 02:34am
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Ahh im so excited for this. your story is one of those that I could read again and again, so im glad your doing a rewrite. It will make the story even better and I will have the chance to read it again! Yay! Good luck :)January 15th, 2012 at 06:00pm
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oh noes! update soon!!April 25th, 2011 at 12:42am
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yay! this is the first chapter i've ever had dedicated to me! :)
and i'm really suspicious of Elliot now. Is he like, cheating on the red head with river? O.o can't wait to find out!April 23rd, 2011 at 11:07pm -
Sooo status says your alive an well, but where's the update? :P lol pleeeeeze, update soon!April 21st, 2011 at 06:25pm
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WOOOOOOOOOW is all i can say. Just wow. I devoured your story within the course of last night and this morning, and now that I've finished it I just can't get over how freaking good - no wait, GREAT - it is. Just WOOOOOOOOOOW! lol
First and foremost - your grammar is excellent. Most stories on Mibba have horrible, HORRIBLE grammar, and its a pain to read. Not only do you place commas where necessary, capitalize when necessary, and everything else, but all of the sentences FLOW together! I LOVE IT!
The perfect mechanics of your story are enough to make me want to read it, so add the wonderful plot and characters and you've got an atomic bomb of a story! Shine bright! lol.
Jared's definitely my kind of guy. The mysterious, hunky, dangerous...YUMMY kind :) I hope River (what beautiful names you chose for the characters, btw!) ends up with him, though of course Elliot with all his god-like glory (and awesome sex skills, gotta give him props for that! :)) makes it a very close competition. I do feel like River is being slightly selfish, playing with each guy's heart, but honestly, if placed in the same situation (god forbid) I would probably have the same reactions. The story is realistic, so, again, good on ya!
On the other hand, I was a bit confused at the last altercation with Mathew. He kills the other detective, Alex, and River just leaves him out there in the rain? I was able to relate to almost all of River's reactions, except that one. Leave a dead cop who just risked his life for her out in the rain? It doesn't say she does anything about him or what happens to him, and all of a sudden, she's getting it on with Jared while the poor guy's out there. Don't get me wrong, the scene with Jared was extraordinarily welcomed - and steamy, and a bunch of other hot, complimentary adjectives - but I slightly disliked this. Also, now that Mathew knows about her position, won't the police move her again? In addition, some information on how Mathew actually found out where she was would be awesome. Who knows, maybe he snuck into the police station and looked at her file? Hmm...that's very far fetched however. It's probably very hard to think up of something like this, but it would add to the realism of the story greatly.
Anyways, I hope they find Mathew and stick him in the electric chair!
And, again, I hope Jared ends up with River, in some way that causes minimal damage to poor Elliot's heart!
Awesome story, can't wait for the update!December 27th, 2010 at 05:05pm -
Hm. I'm confused. Is Elliot suppose to be Matthew?December 27th, 2010 at 11:48am
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your a beautiful writer..you got a way of making people love in love with your work.im here wanting a jared! lol :) keep writingDecember 27th, 2010 at 10:42am
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i just found this. i love it please post moreDecember 27th, 2010 at 07:18am
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oh and love the layoutOctober 1st, 2010 at 02:03am
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JARED
cuz i love him
cant wait for moreOctober 1st, 2010 at 02:03am -
Poor River, she's got I bad. But honestly, due to those pictures posted at the end... Elliot's freaking gorgeous!!! If River doesn't take him, I certainly will :)
More soon??September 30th, 2010 at 10:05pm -
love the new layout and i love jaredSeptember 30th, 2010 at 05:07pm
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AMAZING story
I absolutely LOVE it.
Update soon!September 30th, 2010 at 08:33am -
Good story! :)September 30th, 2010 at 07:57am
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in all honesty-i HATE elliot(i think ive said that before)
Jared is fricken adorable...and i mean...how much sweeter could u get?!September 13th, 2010 at 02:06am -
so sad :(September 11th, 2010 at 09:13pm
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<3 jaredSeptember 11th, 2010 at 03:47am
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Oh, Jared *shakes head* Too many mixed feelings about him, especially when Elliot is lying in pain in the other room! And, you know how I feel about Elliot. But, I just don't know who'd be better for River *sigh*
More soon???September 10th, 2010 at 09:33pm
You describe everything so perfectly. I love the first paragraph. I love the whole thing.
Destructive relationships are my favorite and I seldom find good stories about them, especially on Mibba. But this is so just perfect and amazing.
It's beautiful.
Mesmerizing.
I love it.