Azkaban - Comments

That was bloody brilliant.

So brilliantly written <3 You knocked my proverbial socks off with this one. I just really wish I knew who the girl was :)

This piece was written beautifully and held a lot of emotional qualities. It must have taken you some time to write this piece, as their seems to be a lot of thought process involved in it. It was also a very dark piece and rather scary at times.

To begin with I adored your description of Azkaban. It's very rare that someone will take so much time in their story to telling us readers what Akaban is actually like. Usually, writers give us the usual 'Cold, dark, dreary', but you gave far more and that excited me because this is the first time I've read Azkaban's horrors. By the sounds of your interpretation of the prison, it's defiantly a place I would not like to be.

I also like how you brought together a once highly respected family and showed them at the lowest of the low. I was also fascinated how despite having spent so long within the soul sucking walls of Azkaban, that Draco still had a little bit of man in him and would not succumb to his emotions in front of his father. I like how he clung to what he once was. It's always nice to see the Malfoy's true manor even in the toughest of situations.

I smiled too at the ability of Draco and this strange lady to feed off of each other and use each other as scaffolding to just keep that ounce of sanity. In times of darkness, the strongest force we can own is friendship and I'm happy for Draco that he has someone to turn to, even if it only involves whispers in the darkness.

I found very little that I did not like about this story, but I just will say that here and there I found a few words with a letter short, so I had to double back and reread the meaning of the sentence. I'm not nitpicking, just giving a true review as promised. Also as beautiful as the story was, I found that it could have ended amazingly in the court yard with Draco and his family just sitting there together reflecting on their own misery, trying to cling to what they once had and with Draco, searching aimlessly for that lady, though acknowledging his fears of her discovering who he really was.

But then you carried on and I was like hmm, ok, let's read on and see. What you wrote afterwards I liked. I like the idea of this mysterious patronous. These strange, new people in this dreary world who hopefully may release them. I love the image of the bright patrounous lighting the dark corridors of their cells.

In all I liked this story. It was very well written and really made me fear the confines of that prison. Well done, very well done.

- Robert Pattinson.

This was a very emotional piece and I loved it!
You are a wonderful writer and I enjoyed reading this, even if it was dark.

Brilliant!
I love how dark this piece was, I really could feel the emotion.
Your descriptions were amazing as well. Wow.
Great Job.

that was written so beautifully!
Dark romance - i like that.
Use of description was great; very awe-inspiring!
Great job for a one-shot

oh my god, that was amazing i loved it!!
it was so dark and just amazing...

It is so freaking awesome that I'm speechless.

Dude this was amazing!!!!! It took me forever to read but I never stopped. It was brilliant and I loved it. Like the person above me said. With most wordy stroues I skim but I didn't at all with this one. It was awesome I think I found the winner to my contest =D

This shocked me. It was beautifully written. Normally, when stories I wordy like this I tend to skim this, but this story captured me the entire time, especially at the end. I love how you kept her identity ambiguous, never showing her. It was such a great story, I can't get over how wonderful it was.

I wish more people would read this, it deserves all ten stars.

Cheers, and keep writing. I hope you win the contest.

I just thought I'd drop in and say, oh my freaking gosh that was bloody brilliant !!!

As tired as I am, I could NOT stop reading for one minute. It's brilliant, awe-inspiring, and it makes me want to keep writing to see if I ever get that good. I loved every minute of it, and I've been inspired. I know I'm not the best of artists, but I think I will try to draw Draco in his cell, because that's what image popped into my head clearest...

Anyway, my main reason for commenting was to tell you I absolutely loved it, and that you're a brilliant writer.