Blue Moon - Comments

Chapter 10 is kinda unexpected...especially since it involved a lot of reminiscing. But that's what makes it nice! Good job Ka-chan, te mo... =o=My eyes hurt 'cause of the way you wrote it...

Man, that was pretty random. Yeah u had a lot of errors. First the way you wrote the story made my eyes hurt, seriously! Hm... and when Annie, was talking about the father in 'Black Snow', when she said "I WISH HE WAD GONE!", when it was supposed to be "I WISH HE WAS GONE". The way you wrote the dialogue is very messy.@.@ It can make any person's head spin. I had to read it word per word. There's also an error in the part that they were talking about Sarah. Your 'did' was written as 'de'. I can actually visualize that you typed the story in such a rush, especially when typing the dialogue where they have to shout or panic. But all in all, the plot was pretty good. Just write it in a more organized manner, k, Ka-chan?^ - ^ Oh and when claude assumed that annie thought he was gay... I kinda twitched. Of all possible thoughts... He had to think that annie thought he was gay. 'cry-baby' is more appropriate. Seriously, I would never think that a guy is gay just 'cause he cried!>o< Anyways, I still like the story. I understand that u wanna make it as funny as possible to break the heavy, dark, atmosphere.

Bwahahahaha!!! Loved chapter 8! You seemd to have forgotten about the spacing though...I thought u hated those long paragraphs with conversations since it looks tiring to read..? OH and I was reading chap 8 while listening to Waking Up In Vegas! LOL. Couldn't match the story any better! It felt great reading it!^ - ^ Sugoi Karla-chan!!!

Thanks! >.< I'm working on chap 8!!!

Read chapter 7! Nice!

I meant 'there's still a little brightness in it.' Gomen for the typo, my annoying brother couldn't wait and posted it w/o my permission.

Wow. I really like this story. I have to be honest, even though it's a little dark, I find it kinda cute, and a little funny that I giggle at some parts. See? You're not so bad! Even though it's quite dark, their still a little brightness in it. I think u should continue to write stories like these.

um this is amazing. i wwas wondering... can you add more to it?? its a great story. it would be a real shame if you stopped writting it now....