Another Night Another Score But Feels Like I'm Falling In Love - Comments

  • am0rtentia

    am0rtentia (150)

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    You know what I say?
    Don't like don't look :)

    You know I loved it and I love you too :D
    August 24th, 2009 at 12:20pm
  • yo.

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    I didn't read it because you didn't space out the paragraphs all the way through.

    And, you're not supposed to decorate titles, so you'll have to take out the parantheses, Jack Barakat, and the 'to RainbowVeins'

    All of that stuff belongs in the short description.

    And, you don't have to do this, but I would take out any smileys and any asterisks (**) that you are using to display actions.

    That's what describing things are for, and the smileys are not something a sophisticated writer would use.

    EDIT: I'm sure if you fixed any/all of these things, I would read it, and have an actually nice comment. : )
    August 2nd, 2009 at 05:54pm