Imperio - Comments

For a one-shot I thought this was very good. Had enough detail and background info to keep it going smoothly. Love how you kept her and Ron in character; his saying the three magical little words and her feelig guilt. Great job =]

I've already read this!!!
And I loved it the first and second time! Haha.
Tops.
I'll let you know if you win!

*cries* it fucking harry potter.
i love it. <3

I got lost IN this story.
In a good way.

Wow!
That was amazing. I really really enjoyed it! You kept a nice balance between describing what was going on, and the dialogue. Very very nice.
The plot was very realistic; Ron and Hermione argue a lot, so why should them being married change any of that? You did a really good job of weaving Percy into it. And also, I loved the ending. Actually, a friend of mine did something on a different fanfiction website with the main character Obliviating herself, and I really love the idea. Because it's like, she may no longer remember what had happened, but it had still happened. It makes you wonder whether she and Percy might meet again: if it happened once, there's a chance it'll happen again!
My only slight critisicm would be that the characters personalities aren't really showing. I understand that if you haven't read the Harry Potter series, you would want to be careful, but maybe add in a few little things. I dunno, the characters are a tiny bit bland? Not really, but their personalities don't REALLY show. I think I've said that already...
Well, it was an amazing story, props to you!

It was pretty good for someone who hasn't read the Harry Potter books but you should there really good