Reminisce - Comments

sunset boulevard:

Whoa whoa whoa. She was only trying to give feedback. If you read the description, this was for a contest, and that girl you just told off was the creator of the contest - the judge. Therefore, she was supposed to be giving feedback. Also, attacking her like you did was quite rude. (:

Thank you. :XD

Exile:

It's okay, hun, they don't know what they're talking about. It was amazing. Don't listen to other peoples jealous bull****. :)

As sunset boulevard said, I am only giving feedback. It's for a contest and constructive criticism it always good. :cute:

This was good (: I agree with vicious sex. on the aspect that you should work on how you tell the story more. I'd love to see more detail and information on the plot.
Overall, the plot is quite interesting and really amazing for a story (:

Exile:

It's okay, hun, they don't know what they're talking about. It was amazing. Don't listen to other peoples jealous bull****. :)

Whoa whoa whoa. She was only trying to give feedback. If you read the description, this was for a contest, and that girl you just told off was the creator of the contest - the judge. Therefore, she was supposed to be giving feedback. Also, attacking her like you did was quite rude. (:

vicious sex.:

The plot is amazing.
Now, the story & the grammar, not so much. You need to work a bit on how you're telling the story. You need to remember, what you're thinking is only in your head. You have to describe it enough that your readers get what was in your mind.
It was a good plot, though. You just need a bit more practice, and you'll be fine.
Keep entering contests, ask people for feedback. It's good. Good job. :cute:

It's okay, hun, they don't know what they're talking about. It was amazing. Don't listen to other peoples jealous bull****. :)

The plot is amazing.
Now, the story & the grammar, not so much. You need to work a bit on how you're telling the story. You need to remember, what you're thinking is only in your head. You have to describe it enough that your readers get what was in your mind.
It was a good plot, though. You just need a bit more practice, and you'll be fine.
Keep entering contests, ask people for feedback. It's good. Good job. :cute:

wow this was kinda scary and the Patrick guy is a real bitch im glad he died he deserved it i think you should write this one some more and stuff even though i might get nightmares anyway i like the bad/good guy he is way better than that bitch leaving his fucking mother out in the cold to fie killing so many people urgggh i want to kill him You did a great job at the deatails i really like it!!!!!!!!!!!!

Yayyyy! First comment and subscription! I feel so cool!!!!!!

Anywayssss! I'm so happy that you put this back up!

I laaaavvvvv you for it!

And it is bloody brilliant! In no way is this story lame!

And the pic is just sexual! Love it!

*subscribes*