Starvation - Comments

I love how this is in a guy's perspective. It's truely amazing. ♥

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You've won first place in my prewritten contest
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Wow.
I loved how you turned the beginning paragraph around in the end, how you kept up to the male p.o.v and also how that in the end, not everything was fixed and perfect, but things were looking up. Which is still in-keeping with the topic, its the realisation that's the best part. sorry. rambling. I've dealt all too well with this kinda stuff xD
Anyyyyyyyyyyy way. Brilliant story, amazed you managed to do it in just one chapter ^-^ Bravo xx

I could go all grammar nazi on you and sh*t but I'm too lazy. And plus, I enjoyed your story way too much to actually care.

He chose friends, without thinking about the fact that, friends were nothing like family. Friends could drop you instantly without a second thought. Family would always be there, even if they did hate you.

Sad and honest truth about life. Blood is always thicker than water, always. That's the way it's supposed to be, at least.

Thanks for the entry!

this was sad,
i was close to crying.
good job, even though there were a few typos.

I liked how you went through all the feelings, the insecurity, the media coverage of tiny people and the need to be like them, everything and it was from a males perspective.
Great job.

wow. i love the way you chose to write this. people almost always write with a female main character when they write about some sort of self injury. i'm happy about that :P
there were a few mistakes, but its acceptable, i mean, we are human aren't we?
thanks for entering :)

Like someone else previously mentioned, I really do like that the main character is male. It draws attention to the fact that not only females have body image issues. The character was very easy to relate to, since no one is happy with their body 100% of the time. Not everyone resorts to such drastic measures, but it's good to be well-informed about what society's opinion on what is beautiful can do to someone. You demonstrated a very good knowledge of the subject and made your characters feelings, thoughts, and emotions very believable.

“I missed you to.” To should be too.

He wore baggy cloths around the house... Cloths should be clothes.

The only reason he could tear his eyes away from the sight of himself, was because his vision was swirling with tears. A comma is not necessary between himself and was.

It was the furthest thing from beauty and he didn’t have to dig to deep to feel perfectly worthless and unpretty.
This line was very striking and really resonated with me. Full of raw emotion. Even if unpretty isn't a word. Haha. :)

The ending was great. It didn't completely resolve everything, which is good, because life isn't like a fairy tale, but it did hold a lot of hope for the boy's future. Great work. Thanks for entering this in my contest.

This was really good. What I liked best was that he wasn't blind to the problem and realized the harm of it in the end...an (almost) happy ending. Great job!

...whoa.

That was...amazing.

Since I've joined Mibba I've read a lot of stories about anorexia and bulemia and they have all involved a male. I was surprised and exstatic to see that people actually are able to grasp that this just isn't a female disease, 40% of reported cases are males and the number is rising. I'm very happy you wrote this story. Good job.

One thing. At the end you had a line that read "All that time I had been mutiliation my body," or something along those lines. Probably just a typo, but it should be mutilating XD Thanks

that was brilliant.
well done! :D :)