Lua - Comments

"While I was running, he was running too, but his race had a finish line."
That line just seems crazy powerful to me. You have a lot of crazy powerful lines in this, except I can only contain one in my copy-ing powers.
This was incredible, you're an excellent writer. For me, it got a little confusing toward the end, but the beginning, and the details and descriptions made me fall into the story.
Great great great. :D

i agreee with i'm sykes.

i love lua's character, she's so different. and the relationship she has with oliver is so out there, it's interesting.

i loved it allll. you're a great writer (:
amaaaaaaazing.

good competition. hahahaa <3

holymotherofgod.
That was fucking amazing. Incredible. I loved every last bit of it.
The part where he tells her he's in loved.

And where you use sleeves as a metaphor to describe the drug addiction.

wow.
that was wonderful.