Capture - Comments

This. Is. Amazing.

You absolutely blow me away, Liz. Just, fuck, I am completely and utterly speechless. You are so beyond talented; your way with words will never fail to astonish me. Frankie actually terrifies me, and I got chills from his descriptions, which never happens for me. I think I'd be pretty captivated if I were the narrator as well. I am pretty captivated.

I wish I was more coherent, and could say more. But there's nothing for me to say that hasn't already been said. Incredible. <3

This was such a gorgeous, beautifully unique story. The descriptions were so sweeping and fantastic. Frankie is such a deliciously terrifying and strange and stunningly beautiful character. The story itself is so twisted and turning and I can hardly make head nor tail of it, to be honest. And I completely loved it for that. It makes one think without providing too many details. I admit, the Bill Nye the science guy reference completely threw me. I adored it, really. It was so nerdy, really, and I loved it. It just made me smile, for some reason. It's silly, I know.

You're a fantastic writer. Lovely, lovely.

*drool*.

this is something to be fucking proud of.

wow wow, write more now.
I love it.

Well, my bestie isn't just a wonderful person, she's a very talented writer.
:D
I loved this.

i just, wow. i don't even have words.
this just has this raw feeling, like, i don't even know.
it stuck with me, like how the main character was just sort of watching frank and the blonde.

i can't wait for more.

I would just like to say, for the record, that Chuck Palahniuk would be extremely proud of you and your writing ability. :file:

Btw, when I saw that you posted something new, I got super excited. :tehe:
Elizabeth, you are so talented I can't even think of anything to say to give you a proper review on this. :roll:

It's so lovely to find delights like these when you flick through pimp/recc at 9am. :weird

I've read some of this already because I beta'd it for you, but you never fail to amaze and inspire. You see so many fics set where two characters meet at a party, but this was electrifyingly different. The way the narrator was watching the pair on the couch... it was like it was set in slow motion, their eyes lingering on every detail, unbeknownst to the couple. I don't need to mention every bit of your description I liked, because it was as amazing as ever, but this line especially caught my attention: The room was pulsing, condensation shining on the red walls like the inside of an aorta. :cheese:

I love how you tell the story and don't give anything away at the same time. I'm itching to know who the narrator is, who Noreen is, who Frank really is and what they were doing with that amount of money. Of course you know you've done it on purpose to keep us hanging :grr: but I can't wait for you to write more. I'm also finding it intriguing that Frank went to the party dressed as Nazi - is this a symbolic reference to some part of his personality, or somehting that happens later on?

Amazing as ever, Liz. If I hadn't a project to be doing for school I'd be writing away because everytime I read something of yours I just itch to carry on with my own work even though it will never match a level such as yours. I'm subscribing and no doubt I will go back to it later to re-read. :tehe: :arms: