December 3rd, 2009 at 10:36pm
Whimper - Comments
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Im not a big fan of Sevenfold fics, but I liked the concept of this one...November 30th, 2009 at 12:53am
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Hey, thanks for entering first off. I like the idea, with the flash back and all. It was almost epic, dun dun dun, the beginning...of the whimper. Good job. I liked the end with looking into Brians mind when he really didnt want to argue kinda thing. and nice with 'prepping', though i kinda felt like he was about to do surgury not sex. Overal it was good.
Only a small bit of critisism. Make it more...realistic. Not saying that any sort of fan fiction should be realistic but instead of MOTHERFUCKEROHMYGODJESUSANDMARY etc... sorta thing...something more believable would be a simple bolded and italisized Jesus Christ, Zack!.
Other then that it was great and good luck!October 26th, 2009 at 08:17pm -
Awe! I liked, it was sweet and smexy!September 30th, 2009 at 04:31am
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Awe! I liked, it was sweet and smexy!September 30th, 2009 at 04:30am
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Awe! I liked, it was sweet and smexy!September 30th, 2009 at 04:30am
update soon