The Fienden Crusades - Comments

its pretty good yo

ok thanks for the tip.
hope i can please with the rest lol.

Hmm I quite like this, I can't wait to see where it goes.
Just a tip though, even though books read with just a block of text it can be quite hard to read a story on the computer that has no spaces. So for example for the speech you could have:
"You, young meddler, must learn proper manners and respect." said The Aged Elf sternly.

"But, I was simply trying to-"

"No!" Exclaimed the Aged Elf. "I've had enough of your bloody excuses!" The Young Elf simply looked downwards and didn't say a word.
"The Meinsir wants to see you, Ifron." Stated the Aged Elf. The young elf nodded and straightened himself.

That way it makes it easier to read.
Just a tip though, I love your writing style so keep it up xD
-subscribes-

xD its the intro to the story. its explaining a little bit about what the Elemtions are capable of, and its introducing some key people in the story.
There is supposed to be some things you dont understand.
And im adding some to it right now that will explain what the Young elf was doing.... paitence reigns supreme.

I was a little confused about what exactly happened.. Could you clarify your words? I like the way you wrote, using terms such as "14 winters" instead of just saying he was 14 years old.

haha I wrote for like 10mins on night, and havent been able to write since then but I promise more soon:)
sure sure ^_^

I like it
okay i love it:)
even though there isnt much yet i still love it

read4read?

Thanks much :) Probably gonna write some more soon.
Hope you enjoy the rest.

Lol wow that was awsome!!!!!!!
:D that was so good i really liked it!!!!!! :)