For The Good Of The Pack. - Comments

its amazing

Nice filler! It was awesome! Rayland does sound a little whinny, but to me that's okay. She hasn't sorted out her feelings or exact thoughts on what is happening to her, so it's okay to whine a little.

Raylands and Julians feelings need to be described more, and their chemistry needs to be made a little bit more obvious. But that's just my opinion. You are the writer, so you can write it how you want it! I am just a commenter who is giving suggestions on how to make your story better so you don't loose readers, and to up your story writing creds.

I can't wait for the next chappy. I hope you publish it soon!

love the new chapter!!! XD
awesome!!

hey she doesn't sound like a dominant but does sound whinnie

you did a really good job with this! no, it was not predictable. I liked the ending alot. such a cliff hanger! the story isn't progressing too slowly, but not too fast either. i would put some descriptions of feelings in there, along with physical descriptions, and maybe what the room they are in looks like. Not too many details, but enough to give readers a picture in their head. i can't wait until your next update, keep up the good work!

hahah she called him an asshole. :) aasswome! i love her attitude. i like how the story is steadily progressing and not being slow. its good. :)

hey wow i love you story!!
it wasn't perdictable i thought it was really good!
please hurry and update soon though,,
anyways good job :)

oh my god! this chappy was perfect! the more you keep writing the better you get! and it really showed in this chapter. as soon as i saw that you had posted another chapter i started to hyperventalate (is tht how u spell it?) in anticipation. i predict that the next chapter will actually be about her ending up in a werid position on him or something. i don't know! i'm so excited! update soon please!!!!

awesome, story!! this story is sooo awesome and you have a wonderful idea for this story. can't wait what happens next! :D

*does happy dance* yay! i love this chapy! it's the best one you'v written so far for this story. i'm proud of you! while i was reading i was like, "this turned out really good." i can't wait until you get in to more detail in the story. what will happen between rayland and julian? will rayland kill her step- mother? will julians' fathers' pack come through his town and question his choice for a mate. (wink wink, just gave you a story idea. hehe:) so many endless possibilites and ways to make this story good. i can't wait for the next chappy. update soon!

hey i totaly thought i would not like this story but its great! as long as your writing im reading so dont you dare drop this story... :)

I like the story so far. :) The chapters are so short that they leave me hanging! A little more description, and maybe some background knowledge, and I'm good to go! Hurry up and update a new chappy please!

hey i love your story!
its amazing and i can't wait for more so please keep writing!
:) (: