March 8th, 2013 at 01:53am
*from comment swap*
Layout: I like it, but it could be better. 3/5
Plot: It’s kinda unoriginal, I mean Jackie Collins kinda exhausted the Hollywood teenager thing. 2/5
Writing: I only read chapter one since the plot didn’t seem too interesting to me, but you’re writing style is good. It’s not the best, but its good. It could use some work though. 3/5
Grammar/Spelling: I didn’t see any mistakes. 5/5
Overall: 2.6/5
Advice: I like your writing style, and you do have a lot of potential. You're good at story building, from what I see, and I really think you should try and sit down for a more original and creative plot. Although, I didn't read the whole thing but that's just my opinion. :)
Layout: I like it, but it could be better. 3/5
Plot: It’s kinda unoriginal, I mean Jackie Collins kinda exhausted the Hollywood teenager thing. 2/5
Writing: I only read chapter one since the plot didn’t seem too interesting to me, but you’re writing style is good. It’s not the best, but its good. It could use some work though. 3/5
Grammar/Spelling: I didn’t see any mistakes. 5/5
Overall: 2.6/5
Advice: I like your writing style, and you do have a lot of potential. You're good at story building, from what I see, and I really think you should try and sit down for a more original and creative plot. Although, I didn't read the whole thing but that's just my opinion. :)