Decaying Memories - Comments

Wow, I'm truly amazed.
This was an amazing story; I loved it.

Hopefully you'd want some constructive criticism?
Although, there were few things I'd change.
It was extremely well written.

Towards the beginning, after the wedding part there seemed to be a lot of sentences starting with 'I.'
Other than that, I found nothing wrong with this story.
Not that that's wrong, though; it would just not sound as choppy if some of the sentences were a little different.
It didn't take away from the story, though. At all.

Now onto the good stuff.

Honestly, I think you had a very well-planned plot.
It was very clear, but not vague.
Also, it flowed very well.

Your use of dialogue was excellent, as was your description.
I could picture everything.

You're a great writer. Keep it up.

Congradulations.
You had me near tears.
Aha.
I loved every aspect of it.
It was very well written.
& I liked how you honored him at the end.
Very well done.