Deviation - Comments

This is really good! Please update!

Is it finished? :(

SO YOU THINK IT'S FUNNY, HUH?!
NOT UPDATING, HUH!?!?!?

I'm kidding, but seriously. Update please. :(

Honest to God, I can't get enough of this story. It's fucking unbelievable. I'm aching to know what happens between Karma and John since he said that they needed to talk. Hope you can update soon :)

Woah im hooked!
And im awaiting an update soon please(:

On Fransexi: depends on how well you write it. Therefore, BRING IT GURL.
On the ending: Duh-duh-duhnnn. But I'll have to wait two chapters, or even more, to read what they'll say. But flashback time! I think I like the flashbacks better. Must be my inner romantic/optimist/cutestuffs reader. Will the flashbacks go in chronological order? Just wondering.
Give me my darn Fransexi already.

I think I'm hooked. I love it so much.

OMFG! You made my heart skip beats! UPDATE SO FUCKING SOOOOOON PLEAAAASE D: and no past! PRESENT!!!!!!
and I woudln't read it because Josh is a prick ;3 and he's not that good looking ;D

“Hannah, honestly, what was I supposed to do? What am I supposed to do? Ignore her? Act like she didn’t play an important role in my life for a good year? Please, be reasonable,” - i'm glad john has finally grown some sort of balls to stand up for karma!! unlike the previous chapters where he sort of just let it slide.

"John sound desperate and irritated." - don't wanna be a nazi, but, 'sounded' ? or no?

"“Oh, come on, John,” Hannah replied, her voice suddenly soft and pleading, “I see the way you look at her, the way you talk about her, even when she isn’t around. There’s always more of a sparkle in your eye with Karma’s involved in some way. You’re just happier with her. Why else would you have taken out that booklet before our anniversary dinner?” " JUICY JUICY DRAMA!! why isn't her name drama and not karma?! especially since she attracts so much of it!! yeoww!

"Only I would know if he bluffing;" - and again, don't wanna be a nazi... but... 'was bluffing'?

i'd like one of two things to happen, she somehow realises kenny is a massive babe and he realises the same thing about karma and they get together and live happily ever after, despite the fact that you pinned this as a john ohh story! haha. orrrrr john realises he was a massive douchebag, breaks up with hannah for karma who has changed her over dramatic ways and they live happily ever after.

as per usual, i loved it. and you were wrong, it didn't at all suck hardcore so you apologized for NOTHING!! :P

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that was one juicy update.
the possiblity of John still having feeling for her, over even his new girl, is amazing.
and really? you had to end it there?
I kid, I'm not upset but I am really eager to see what he wants to say.
It's going to be especially hard to wait since I have to wait until the next, next update to find out how it goes.

Girl, seriously... there is no way that you can just leave it at that.
My nerves are seriously going crazy right now with excitement. Part of me hopes that he'll be all douchebag-ish so that we can get some added drama in, plus maybe the Kennedy idea. But then I don't want that to happen at the same time because I want his Hannah bitch to just get the hell out.

Kenny's so adorable though the way he gets all protective.

Oh! And lets go back to Hannah. What the hell is her problem? Basically, she's telling John that he can't look and/or talk to Karma because he allegedly still has feelings for her. Even if this was true why the hell is she bringing this up now while everybody and their mother can hear?
I feel like she's being a little over dramatic, but at the same time trying to get as much attention as possible.

I wish she would get the memo that nobody's going to pick her over Karma. And if they do it won't be for long.

Ohmy, that was amasingly intense & awkward for Karma. Kennedy's a sweetheart.
& I'm really excited for what John has to say to her.

Your writing is extremely good & I love it. <3

I didn't comment this earlier and I'm so sorry! I'm so bad with discipline and if I don't comment the second I finish reading I always forget.
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I enjoy that she doesn't shower so much. Makes her seem more... real? Easier to relate to? Maybe that's because I'm currently sitting on my bed and haven't showered since like Tuesday. Gross? Possibly.

I must say that I'm slightly disappointed in the fact that they didn't really celebrate their anniversary. Not because I believe in them or anything, but because I feel like he would whip something totally cute out of his ass to impress her and I would be able to swoon just a bit more than I already do over the man.

"So if we have kids one day, does that mean I get to name them?"
Oh god, could you imagine if he were actually left to that task? He'd throw out some crazy ass name that might be acceptable in native american cultures.... 300 years ago.

But next is the chapter after he left her in the kitchen right? After he let whats her face read Karma's personal note and such....
I have a bad memory :(
EITHER WAY I'M VERY EXCITED FOR THIS.

way too perfect.

it's really weird how i find similarities in karma and myself. especially with the lack of shaving legs when not around boyfriend and views on anniversaries, i am HORRIBLE with anything date related and i don't see it as important anyway so, why bother?

love how he understood her though, it was sweet. ugh, why can't they just get back together again?!

as per usual, i can't wait to read more! this is probably one of few stories i actually enjoy enough to comment on!! i only save comments for my FAVOURITES!! :)

Hey, look, I'm here! Back-to-back comments. Woot.

First off:
"Right, right. It's just me that you hang around when those beasts are at their hairiest." Hilar.

Cocky John, explanations of the past, in-depth understanding, semi-awkward feeling around the new 'boundaries' at the start of the relationship... I can see them being a new couple. And thank the stars for Jessica.
But what's really got me thinking is... she doesn't like anniversaries here. But she made him that book at their one-year shindig. Hmm... what made her change?
Stuff keeping me up at night. Okay, not at night, but keeping me checking my email more often than not. :)

Top Three Reasons To Hate Summer School:
1. It keeps me from reading online stories and keeping up
2. It keeps me from finishing up a one-shot I started back in April
3. It keeps me away from the internet in general (tumblin', facebookin', mibbuhin', etc.)
So, now that I have a barely viable excuse, sorry I'm late. :/ But I'm here! My favorite part of this chapter was the tension in the living room. I could feel it, I really could. My least favorite part, as with any story, was the couple of grammar mistakes. Of course, we all make them. I make them too. (Is this where I say, "Just sayin'."? I don't know.)
But great update. :)

ohmygod :/ ILOVETHIS

that was SO good!!

i'm really surprised he kept the book, and the fact that he went searching for it moments before hannah got there. but i'm a little peeved that he didn't stick up for karma a bit more and tell her it wasn't for her to read!! silly john!

can't wait to read more lovely!!!!!

I'm really suprised he kept the book. And I know this might sound odd but I'm really well, I guess you can say proud? of how Karma handled herself in front of him. I would expect that it would be harder for her seeing as how they just had their anniversary but I'm really happy that she dealt with it the way she did.
I feel like John might be feeling a little mixed up and I'm really excited about it :)

This was so great, I can't even put into words how much love I have for you right now.
I'm pretty sure it's enough to cross the country... can you feel it?

I just... ugh. I can't even imagine having someone else, let alone my ex boyfriends current girlfriend, read all my personal feelings that I put into words for one specific person only. I would be beyond horrified, and I don't see why she isn't crying or super pissed. She's so calm about everything.
Just saying - if I found out that some douche was showing his skank (that's what I refer to her as - my ex boyfriends crazy fake tanned bitch of a girlfriend) everything I wrote him I would actually probably kick both of their asses so hard.

But I don't even know why the hell Hanna would want to read it anyway. Like, what was she trying to get out of it?
Its common sense that getting too deep into their past wouldn't be something that would make her happy in the end. Was she just looking for a fight or something?

And why the hell wouldn't John rip it out of her hands and tell her that even though it's over with Karma it's still not right for someone other than him to be reading something that's so personal to her? That's a dick move.

Awe but her cat's name is Daisy <3