I will change those lol nd thnx <3
August 22nd, 2009 at 12:15am
First Chapter:
First Paragraph:
the word "red" is spelled wrong. haha
last sentence should be "Lily and I" instead of "me and Lily"
No more errors as far as I can see on that chapter. Haha.
Second Chapter:
Umm about halfway down:
Ben is talking and he says "..say something to Me" me shouldn't be capitialized. (sp?) hah
No more errors as far as I can see on that chapter.
I lovedddd it. That was absolutely amazing. The way you turned that simple picture into a wild two-shot story was unbelievable. I have to say, it was veryyy original and very good. I applaud.