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  • The Violet Writer

    The Violet Writer (100)

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    Wow...I missed a lot. XD
    And i really enjoyed the double meaning in the last title chapter...The First Move reffering to The Dream and The First Move reffering to Jon and Radi's night together...
    I was SO not expecting that by the way. One heck of a twist!
    August 31st, 2009 at 03:49am
  • The Violet Writer

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    Okay...in chapter 7, you mixed up 'through' and 'threw'. The first is like going through, as in "He went through the door", and the second is like he threw, as in "He threw the ball." Just a thought. :)
    August 31st, 2009 at 03:38am
  • yellow ninja

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    love ur story so far let me know when you finsh
    August 26th, 2009 at 01:04am
  • The Violet Writer

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    Aww...Jon and Radi are cute. :)
    August 24th, 2009 at 01:19am
  • The Violet Writer

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    Moving along nicely. :)
    August 22nd, 2009 at 11:42pm
  • She Loves You-YaYaYa

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    Let me know what you think of my story! ^.^
    August 22nd, 2009 at 08:44pm
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